Requital: The Crimson Path

Requital: The Crimson Path

A Poem by Franklin...
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Vengeance. Nothing you haven't read before.

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Bloody hands
Drip upon these sands
Icy wrath
Carved this crimson path

Calamitous eyes
Disregard their pitious demise
Kind heart
Did long ago depart...
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Kindred dead
Each in their bed
Soul shattered
Obliterated all that mattered

Vengeful quest
South North East West
Destitute inside
Love and comfort denied

Obscuring dune
Foiled by Vali's boon
Rage then
Unleashed upon wretched men

Effulgent axe
Struck in frenzied attacks
Mindless beast
Corrupted by pain unreleased...
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Red earth
These men's eternal berth
Yet torment
Still does not relent

He stands
Amidst the drifting sands
Soul downcast
Gazing at times past.

© 2010 Franklin...


Author's Note

Franklin...
Vali is apparently a Norse god of Vengeance and Rebirth.
I was aiming for the first pair of lines in each stanza to be rooted in the physical world, while the second pair address linked, but more ethereal matters.

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this is kind of a dark poem, to wut i could understand. [rite???] (my vocabulary is very limited). "Calamitous eyes/Disregard their pitious demise" strong wording there and throughout the poem. the imagery of the poem seems quite vivacious and lively.

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Wow, this is wonderful. Such a dark path to walk. I like it. Also within your words I also found some truth. I enjoyed this immensely!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is kind of a dark poem, to wut i could understand. [rite???] (my vocabulary is very limited). "Calamitous eyes/Disregard their pitious demise" strong wording there and throughout the poem. the imagery of the poem seems quite vivacious and lively.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

an exellant piece of work, loved the imagery

Posted 10 Years Ago


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I think this would be a great poem to put in a story. Or you could simply write a story based on this, and include it. Really great descriptivism, nice work!

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Added on August 22, 2010
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Tags: loss, quest, bloody hands, revenge

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