I Promised

I Promised

A Chapter by Wondering Mind

 

Promises I’ve seen flow abundantly
in prose and much poetic rhyme
of flashy floral fantasies
and “love” till the end of time
 
But too soon did I discover
how weak these were to the test
so decided with the modest self
not to embroider like the rest
 
No promise was made of Eden
or wild wanderings where whim wills
no stardust form your favorite star
or aimless walks on faraway hills
 
Our love was born sure and true
so my promise was as pure as can be
with heart and soul I vowed to you
and humbly I promised you me


© 2010 Wondering Mind


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You hit this right from the first paragraph and you never looked back. Very nice flow and the read was amazing. I like the simple promise they are easier to keep than the grander ones.

Posted 13 Years Ago


ah yes, that's about as sweet as it comes

Posted 13 Years Ago


"...humbly I promised you me" ...that is simply beautiful!

Posted 13 Years Ago


One suggestion, change "so my promise was as true as can be " to so my promise was as pure as can be . I love this simple commitment poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Nothing better than straight from the heart, my friend
There is something to be said of honesty...I have learned that lesson well :)
Excellent piece

Lynda

Posted 15 Years Ago


Love with peasant bones. Very nice. Alliteration too. Not enough imagery though.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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