Sadness Looms

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Gray sadness on mankind looms

And forsaken peace ponders its fate

A flower fading before it blooms

 

Gray sadness on mankind looms

 

Love left to burn out ; ashes and fumes

Greed and hunger; horrid war and hate

 

Gray sadness on mankind looms

And forsaken peace ponders its fate

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Wondering Mind,

A harsh and accurate condemnation of Man's failings. Why, oh why, do we let anger and fear dominate our doings? Through this poem I feal the pain and the desperate longing for change. It is a recognition of our petty impulses.

Well penned, my friend!

Best regards,

Rick

[Seracies]

I had to read it a couple times because I felt I wasn't getting the full message of what was written. I loved how you repeated those thoughtful and powerful statements, leaving no ambiguity to the devastation of mankind. Beautifully written in a short number of words.

[SilentDream]

The correlation of forsaken peace and a flower fading before it blooms is truthful.
Very well written.

Pen on ~SilentDream

[Anita B Jacques]

Good write, grey sadness is very havy, the computer age is a Growing Cancer in the lives of many.
Thank you my friend for sharing. God bless

[Anita B Jacques]

My dear friend how are you ?,A good write, The words are true and so sad, the knowledge of our sorry state hits harder with your poem." A flower fading before it blooms". I'm not surprise by it all, it's like
deja vue, in many predictions, a rerun. Thank you for sharing. God Bless you.
Hugs, love and friendship
Annie

[Michael X]

The color of sadness indeed, looms and your words draw the reader to ponder the very aspects of such
and the scope of depth is insightful in ways that speak to the soul, this is very well written.

[emmajoy]

Gray sadness on mankind looms - that repeated phrase sends shivers down my back.. it's like a drum of words try to get across the meaning of tragedy.

The beauty of your poem hides the ugliness of the truth.

Fine, fine post.

[Ahmad Alhour]

"And forsaken peace ponders its fate"; what a depressive one... thought, I believe you got a thought to deliver...

[kbob]

I just finished reading Cormac Mcarthy's "The Road" when i got on hoping to find something funny or at least happy that i could read and cheer myself up. And i find this. Anyway, even with tears in my eyes, i can still say this is an exellent piece

[Janice Scott]

I agree with 'Everchanging.' This is as breathtaking as it is true! Excellent piece!