A Chapter by Wondering Mind

My glass has out drunk this bottle

Shadows shimmy across the wall

Life like laminations of lifelessness

Funny how the flicker of a candle

Flirts with the imagination!

And I want more

to drink more delusion

Drown deeper in this dizziness


Before my candle burns out.

Before they stop

Those shimmy shadows on the wall

© 2010 Wondering Mind

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love the alliteration, it suits the writing well. Makes it symmetrical of sorts. I love the candle, flirting with the imagination.. sexual fire.. lol =) great writing

Posted 11 Years Ago

unlike existence, bottles run dry

Posted 11 Years Ago

The imagery in this is great.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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I've been feeling that every few hours for some reason. No idea why. This poem makes me want to set up a desk in a room with no electricity, light some candles, and see what I come up with. Awesome work.

Posted 11 Years Ago

brilliant first line
and third

great poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago

- oh there are some really great images your words conjure here - and i agree with james - the alliteration is praiseworthy - for me - the even more fascinating aspect of your poem is how it speaks directly to the reader - and that last stanza - is breathtaking!! beautiful, vivid and delicate!

Posted 11 Years Ago

Alliteration is the fascination of this poem and I like it. Like a presentation firearm engraved with filigree, the attention is somewhat focused on the craftsmanship rather than the purpose but I am a detail lover. Quality is always worth analysis.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on October 3, 2010
Last Updated on November 20, 2010

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