lets pretend

lets pretend

A Poem by wordman
"

a man still in love with the one he lost

"

I know you loved me

a long time ago

but I know its him

tonight you hold

 

when you close your eyes

let it be me that you see

pretend your still in love

with me

 

and when you kiss

and hold him tight

pretend its me your with tonight

 

my heart wont let you go

I still pretend that you

love me so

 

when I go to bed

with her tonight I will

pretend its you im holding tight

 

I still love you

I want you to know

my heart just wont let go

 

so tonight

it will be you I see

when shes making love

to me...

© 2017 wordman


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wow isn't the truth at times that when we are making love to someone we don't love we hope and just pretend it is the one we love who is not with us
sad sad song and your poem is simple and oh so true and sad thanks winner!

Posted 6 Years Ago


 wordman

6 Years Ago

thank you marilyn
oh man! its one thing to think of the one that doesn't love us ..and still want her/him ..but i have to be honest sir ..when the protagonist begins to beg her/him to do likewise is just to much ...i want to "b***h" slap that guy and tell him to wake up!!!
your ending surprised me ...i'm glad he at least is holding a real body ;)
the longing evoked is strong ...most have suffered such a relationship .. seems unavoidable if we love at all ... the read is smooth .. the theme strong and clear .. i hardly notice the change in number of lines per verse ..and the seemingly unorganized rhyming is like sips of elixer alnog the way ...but that guy has got to get off it ... f'get-a'bod-it ...he's off the edge :)))
E.
ps. very appropriate title and song .. it all fits nicely

Posted 6 Years Ago


 wordman

6 Years Ago

i agree with you completely,it came from the song
hell,just kiss and say goodbye
Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

:) ................ yep ..simple and sweet ...
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If we can't be with the one we love honey, love the on your with...but sometimes, it's easier said than done. The heart wants what it wants and sometimes it won't be satisfied with anything else...
This was a lovely, really well done expression of longing, dear poet

Posted 7 Years Ago


 wordman

7 Years Ago

lol,you go way back in my past,just a write,thank you
Ron, just going back to your beginning and rereading your writes. Valentine

Posted 7 Years Ago


Really good poem you have here. It's sad to know this does happen to people more often than not. You really captured the emotions needed for this poem. Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


 wordman

8 Years Ago

thank you for the visit
Ouch! Hmmmm tell me people don't really do this. Gotta love the one you're with no? Brings out a great point though that many are still deeply in love with lost lovers. Nicely inked.

Posted 8 Years Ago


 wordman

8 Years Ago

well i hope not,but it`s true for many

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