Bitter Sweet Memories

Bitter Sweet Memories

A Poem by wordman



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bitter sweet memories,

lay gentle on her mind,

another place,

another time.

 

The love

of my life,

that i have,

left behind.

 

she feels betrayed,

battered and beaten,

all through her mind,

she feels like a woman left behind.

 

Once her heart,

a beautiful rose,

now her heart tattered and torn,

as it starts to close.

 

Her mind wanders,

her soul at bay,

maybe love will bloom again,

i hope and pray.

 

A woman,

that has lost her bloom,

her heart melts,

as it goes back in her cocoon.

 

But one day,

her heart will start to bloom,

and i will be there,

to melt that cocoon...


© 2017 wordman

© 2018 wordman


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I love this poem, it's very well crafted and written- you have a very good use of emotion your writing, well done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

thank you for the visit
So electrifying! My heart did skip a beat! Love your writing as always

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

thank you for reading,glad you liked it
It's a very nice poem. Beautiful picture too :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

thank you,glad you liked it
Avia

2 Years Ago

You're welcome
Indeed a romantic overture Ron as the protagonist is prepared to wait for the love of his life and to rescue her from her retreat. Love the tenor of it a lot but unsure about the repetition and rhyming scheme.

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

me neither john,lol,,thank you
Romantic, sweet write. Loved everything about it, especially the 4th stanza

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

thank you for the visit
Aw, thats so sweet. The last para is worth fantasizing about. Beautifully penned!

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

thank you zoe
Zoya

2 Years Ago

No problem
Very romantic and mesmerizing. One of your best. Always an honor to visit you.

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

thank you for the visit sami
Sami Khalil

2 Years Ago

You are welcome. Any time.
Sometimes I can listen to a song for the first time and it will bring out all emotions. This poem did the same.
I like the way you are letting "her, us, and everyone) know that even the broken heal with time, even the heart.
Everything about this poem was perfect in every way. Nice work!

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

thank you for the visit diane
I made a true effort to choose my favorite stanza of this poem, but they all rivaled my attention so completely that I would have copied and pasted the entire poem here!

On a heart/soul level - this poem spoke directly to me. How I have been there, closing up. You absolutely nailed it - so much in so few words. The gravity of your word choice and phrasing really makes the poem so much more that lines upon paper. It extends to every moment of life, to every woman (and dare I say, every man). For, all have suffered such pains of love lost, or love given up, choices made, lives lived in spite of it all. I could go on and on about the depth I feel for your sentiment and these words, but I digress.

It is the visual simplicity of this work that first grabbed me. Each time I open your work, I do so simply understanding that my emotions are about to be employed, that I will feel every line, that i will swoon, I will chill, I will cheer, I will cry - but the simplicity of this visual presentation gave me a "stark" impression straight away. The center alignment - much like walking a straight line. This piece of art is a statement of what simply "is." This is going to to be a lesson in life reality, whether it be for joy or for saddness.

The sparse use of capital letters reinforced the impression that this is secretive. This is information hidden in plain sight, and will only be seen in soul-terms, experientially. If you haven't felt it, you simply will not "get it."

This presents like an invitation one gives pause before reading. It is going to reveal something monumental and first the reader emotionally prepares, knowing the RSVP will require action, accounting, planning, accepting or declining of a truth.

This one is going straight to my favorites - perhaps my all time favorites. This, to me, is the whole package, my friend. You have appealed to my visual side and my soul. Kudos, kudos, kudos.

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

thank you for the beautiful review,,this poem is very real for a lot of people,like you said,you hav.. read more
This speaks so softly of being the light to someone and the healing that brings forth. Spoken with compassion and warmth, lovely :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

thank you poppy

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