America

poem from college

America I’ve given you all and now I’m nothing

I have come back to your shore

form a distant land where my eyes

were released from your

chains

I am free as the crow in the sky.

It is funny to think that you

want to cover my eyes once again

but I won’t let you.

I shall spread my thoughts

to the wind

So others can be torn away from

your rusted chains

That hold woman to stoves

and men to desks.

Their children forced to believe

things that aren’t real.

America were have you gone.

The one that I knew

when I was a child

Is now gone from my life

never to return to me

So I shan’t waist my tears

for you.

Reviews

[L Williams]

A heartfelt and sad poem of how things used to be. You've expressed your opinion very well. I've included some suggestions below for your consideration:

That hold (women)

America were have you gone(?)

The (America) that I knew

(Omit Is) Now gone from my life

(waste) my tears


Well done!