Sour

Sour

A Poem by the writer of woe
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Yet another poem about my beloved.

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I can't remember a time
Where my love was not alive
She is the sparkle of my eyes
The only one whom I do not despise
I cannot say what I feel
Because I know it won't be real
For I cannot express the feelings I know
And nothing will ever be enough to show
Her lips have always tasted so sweet
As she has never been away from me
But here now, as I count the hours
I realize her lips have never tasted this sour

© 2015 the writer of woe


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You definitely have a unique style to your work, I enjoyed reading this
it's well thought out and penned, the sweet to sour shows emotions
being revealed almost as a new enlightenment and not necessarily
a good one:( Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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You definitely have a unique style to your work, I enjoyed reading this
it's well thought out and penned, the sweet to sour shows emotions
being revealed almost as a new enlightenment and not necessarily
a good one:( Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Made me feel like I was 16 at my old ex-girlfriend's house sitting around watching some stupid show that I don't remember. I remember knowing that it was just stupid love and that there was no real subsistence in our relationship. What can I say? Dumb kids doing dumb things. It was beautiful and horrible all-together.

Posted 5 Years Ago


the writer of woe

5 Years Ago

That's sad. I hope you find a good relationship or have one right now.
Hi Writer of Woe (coolest moniker ever by the way!) - I would drop the comma - it looks so out of place

"For I cannot express the feelings I know
And nothing will ever be enough to show " - words fail us often - language is limited but feelings arent so the frustration is palpable in these lines. So many will relate to these truths - though they may seem personal - they are actually universal.

The bitterness at the end is the frustration focussed into a pinpoint like the light of a laser and really packs a punch.

well penned WoW (so cool that name!!)

Posted 5 Years Ago


the writer of woe

5 Years Ago

Thanks a lot! This is the most helpful review I've gotten so far. I'll be sure to edit it!
ANTO

5 Years Ago

glad if I could assist WOW. - never grows old that username - brilliant - xDD
the writer of woe

5 Years Ago

Thanks lol :)

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Added on March 13, 2015
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