Dark and Sinful

Whispering in your ear

of better things to come.

Movements gliding, 

caressing your worries.

She blinds your eyes

to the things she does.

With a beauty, 

dark and sinful,

she lures you in 

too far.

Until you drown,

until you give up

into her waiting arms.

Your worries fade away

under her gentle touch,

and you

no longer exist.

Because, with a beauty,

dark and sinful,

she lures you in

too far

Author's Note

One of the things I like to do with my poems when the idea may not be directly obvious is let the reader interpret it the way they want. Maybe it represent something different to you, let my know if your review if you do.
My take on this poem, is it's about depression/thoughts of suicide. How depression can make you blind to the sadness you may be causing to the people around you and how you drown in your sorrows and sadness until you reach thoughts of suicide where
"With a beauty
dark and sinful,
she lures you in
too far"

Note: I myself am not suicidal nor depressed. But I have friends who are and it is a very real thing to me. I also haven't written anything in a long time so I'm trying to get back into it and comments/constructive criticism is appreciate :)

Reviews

[N.E. St. Andrew]

I have to agree with Todd with it leaving me wanting more. Beautifully written! "Your worries fade away
under her gentle touch,/and you/no longer exist." I love this part... just as an idea: maybe expand on that quoted part. Delve into this new existence, maybe the ecstasy that it gives or the oblivion. As someone who struggles with depression I can relate to this. In your note you speak of how depression can affect others. Maybe transition from this inner monologue that you kind of have going here to the outer chaos. Again, wonderful job! Can't wait to see more!

[N.E. St. Andrew]

Also, I am curious to know why you chose to embody depression as female entity. Interesting choice.

[Amanda Worthington]

Thank you :) I'm not entirely sure why I chose to portray depression as female. I'm not trying to say that depression only affects women. But for the most part I don't. Depression seems more feminine than it does male though. At least, in my opinion. And thank you for your help. I'll take into consideration what you said about adding on to it

[N.E. St. Andrew]

I didn't mean anything by asking I was just curious :)

[Jan Drei]

I want more stanzas (!). That was very dramatic to read. Job well done.

[Amanda Worthington]

Thank you :) and i did feel like I ended it too abuptly but I've been working on it for weeks with no idea how to get passed the first two stanzas. I'll try thinking on it over the weekend.