Me+Her=Forever

Me+Her=Forever

A Poem by kendrich russel young

As i met her first at school
I thought if i acted cool
She would think me cute and funny
But just as cute as a baby bunny

She fills my heart with joy and happiness
But not like heartbreaks sappiness
People say its wrong and not right
But i know our love squeezes tight

All I love to say to her
Is you+me=forever
She smiled she blushed
But her heart i know i touched

© 2012 kendrich russel young


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Your poem is simple to understand and easy to read, yet speaks of powerful emotions. I would suggest getting rid of a couple of 'but' words in the first and last verses. I'm not sure I would want to be regarded as a cute bunny, but hey, that's the writers choice. Interesting poem. Keep writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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To Pencrafter: I haven't written in a while and i was told about this site and gave it a try i will do better in future writes


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AWWWW i love this its so cute your gf is a very lucky girl :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nicely written and emotional.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your poem is simple to understand and easy to read, yet speaks of powerful emotions. I would suggest getting rid of a couple of 'but' words in the first and last verses. I'm not sure I would want to be regarded as a cute bunny, but hey, that's the writers choice. Interesting poem. Keep writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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kendrich russel young

San Jacinto, CA



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