The Sky

Randomly came to me and i wrote it down... Not as good as some of my other peices, but i decided to post it anyway.

 

 

I watch through clouded eyes as the sky cries with me.

Raindrop after raindrop, tear by tear.

I take off my jacket to reveal my bare arms and let the sky cry with me.

I ran through the grass to my beloved cherry tree.

I climb, attempting to outrun the pain and escape from the tears.

I soon reach my branch and I sit, water drenching my torn up jeans.

Rain seeps between the leaves and kisses my skin.

The sky cries with me.

I take out a pocket knife and carve into the tree, adding to the countless other cuts and markings on the stripped bark I had previously added.

I accidentally cut my finger and scarlet runs down the grey brown trunk mixed with rain. Soon the clouds clear and tears disappear.

I wait patiently for when the sky and I can cry again.

 

 

Author's Note

tell me what you think!!!

Reviews

[Honestly, Abe]

What an emotional journey this is. Your language is unique in its subjectivity. I feel very connected with the speaker in this poem because your language makes it so. Impressive, and very honest in its descriptions. I love your personification of the weather.(:

[Rose Kavanagh]

Very well-done, I'm impressed. Great imagery and interesting use of words - I like it :)

[KL]

Great use of repetition and hyperbole. Waiting for the sky to cry with you? That takes the poem's concept to an entirely new level... apart from heartbreak and shed tears, it almost sounds like the narrative wants to 'cry with the sky' again.

Thanks for sharing.

[Nichole Marie]

It takes my breath away how this poem is basically saying that the sky is a person... it's your best friend... it's mind boggling and I like it :)

I've also realised that you say scarlett instead of blood. lol. it's interesting. =)

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad but beautiful written poem. Time alone we can heal and think. Thank you for sharing.
Coyote

[A]

Love the imagery. The way you worded it allowed me to picture it perfectly. Great poem! :)