What Next?

What Next?

A Poem by Alias

So close, I am, to being free
To reach that immortality
of boundless youth
And endless years
Untouched, as yet,
By 'grown up' fears.

So close, I am, to reaching that
Forever dream so far off at
Some future place
So often seen
That I'd forgot
It was not fantasy

So close, I'm scared
Without that dream, I'm bared
That's it, I've done
All I planned to do
And I'll be spent
By twenty-two

So close, excited see
To reach that immortality
But it won't last 
Which has me vexed
Then, I'm scared to ask
What next?

© 2016 Alias


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the fear of what comes next---or if we will make the right decisions...check second stanza, fifth line.

i like this...had me singing Simon and Garfunkel...

"i was twenty-one years when i wrote this song, i'm twenty-two now, but i won't be for long; time hurries on, and the leaves that are green turn to brown."

j.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alias

7 Years Ago

Thanks for pointing that out - i fixed it! And what a great lyric - what song is it from?
jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

"Leaves that are Green" from the Sounds of Silence album...



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Exquisite...

The themes and concepts are universal in their applications. A mourning of youth and a fear of growing older, feeling that you won't be able to have fun and do the things you like to do.

This poem is very good, Alias! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


A hard world to be young in.
So close, I'm scared
"Without that dream, I'm bared
That's it, I've done
All I planned to do
And I'll be spent
By twenty-two"
I understand the above lines. I have four children. Working hard and struggling. I tell them. Go forward and keep learning. All we can do. I liked the poem. Made the reader think and ponder. Thank you Alias for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


good rhyming style and overall flow and feeling.

Posted 7 Years Ago


at the end i had to ask myself again WHAT NEXT,nicely written and keep it up

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beautifully written.i love the starting line.very clever way of writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


As Thoreau wrote, "live deep and suck out all the marrow of life". And as the character Andy Dufresne said in 'The Shawshank Redemption', "Get busy living, or get busy dying". Only you can decide what's next but whatever it is do it the max & have no regrets. The sky is the limit. Very thought provoking. Nicely done.

Regards

Posted 7 Years Ago


The thoughts of unknown future scares us, it makes our heartbeat tremble... I loved the concept and the way you put your thoughts in this write with a vision of life and it's memories... Who knows something great is going to happen next... Superb job...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

so close,yet so far away..

Posted 7 Years Ago


the fear of what comes next---or if we will make the right decisions...check second stanza, fifth line.

i like this...had me singing Simon and Garfunkel...

"i was twenty-one years when i wrote this song, i'm twenty-two now, but i won't be for long; time hurries on, and the leaves that are green turn to brown."

j.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alias

7 Years Ago

Thanks for pointing that out - i fixed it! And what a great lyric - what song is it from?
jacob erin-cilberto

7 Years Ago

"Leaves that are Green" from the Sounds of Silence album...
I enjoyed the feelings and emotions, great poem!

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on June 20, 2016
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Tags: university, aspiration, dream, child, adult, young adult, youth, fear

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Alias
Alias

Brighton, United Kingdom



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