Hands

Hands

A Poem by Alias

I love your hands
for all they do
and all they're yet to hold
for all they've learned
to write, to feel
Their adventures are untold

I love each callous 
for all it tells
of toil that you've spent
of endless hours
on things you love
your talents and intent

I love each scar
Each sun-kissed fold
That marked you in years past
the nicks, the cuts
That each have healed
But still they left their mark

I love your hands
for all they are
and all they're yet to be
they'll hold me tight
and live through fights
and they've left their scars on me

© 2016 Alias


Author's Note

Alias
This needs some tweaks so please don't hesitate to make suggestions, there are a few weak lines I think

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This poem is virtually perfect!! My only suggestion is to complete the rhyme with "past"/"mark", which is the only stanza that doesn't have a complete rhyme, and with the musicality, it's easily noticeable, and it kind of mars the poem a bit given the rest follows a rather systematic scheme. Otherwise, every line is brilliant!! Well done!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Powerful and honest words. My favorite kind.
"I love your hands
for all they are
and all they're yet to be
they'll hold me tight
and live through fights
and they've left their scars on me"
The above lines solid and real life. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


Hmm, great story telling style you have. It reads like prosetry. I enjoyed this a lot!

Posted 3 Years Ago


the attempt at least was good, if it does in fact needs tweaks. personally I hate tweaking stuff after working hard on it, not that I'm not open to suggestions myself lol. anyways, I still liked this.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Interestingly interesting.

Posted 4 Years Ago


I thought this was a simple yet potent writing. It's late and I'm tired otherwise I might find some criticisms but again, too brain dead to say anything other than I enjoyed it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


I love how you can take any topic in the universe and dress it up or down. You choose hands and I think it works. If you feel like there's room for improvement reread it and tell us what you decide to do.

Posted 4 Years Ago


I love your hands
for all they are
and all they're yet to be
they'll hold me tight
and live through fights
and they've left their scars on me



i see some one is in love here,great way to express you feelings keep it up

Posted 4 Years Ago


Very romantically written. I've never thought about the tales that hands can tell. I love the original concept, and I especially like the tie-in with the first and last stanzas.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

loved it ! we take a lot of things for granted,but the guidance we receive never leaves us
loved the theme of the write

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 22, 2016
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Tags: love, hands, poem, poetry, scars, work, relationships

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Alias
Alias

Brighton, United Kingdom



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Poems that come out of my brain. I love to learn from others, so please review and let me know if you want me to read anything of yours, I have a million read requests so if there is a specific p.. more..

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