Delusional Vision

Always being two steps ahead sometimes puts you four behind.

I asked a boy to be my date,

To really show we're not straight.

 

I wanted to make a scene so fine,

And let people know this life is mine.

 

I was ready to fight the school for rights,

To take a guy on that special night.

I wanted to take him out to eat,

And pull out his chair as he takes a seat.

 

I was ready to smile as we eat our meal,

To hold his hand and see how it feels.

I wanted to wait outside in a line so long,

And be nervous to dance to the first song.

 

I was ready to smile to the cop at the door,

To walk hand-in-hand with my date to the floor.

 

I wanted to hold him tight as we dance,

And my head on his chest feeling almost entranced.

 

I was ready to mingle with all of his friends,

To talk, laugh and dance until the very end.

 

I wanted to walk him up to his door,

And want to leave quick but be glued to the floor.

 

I was ready to be struck with a beautiful bliss,

As he leans in for that special good night kiss.

 

I wanted to have a date on that night,

And feel like my life is not wrong but right.

 

I was ready to cry about the answer I heard,

The boy ruined my night with one single word:

 

 

"NO"

Author's Note

This was typed pretty quick so if I have any major mistakes please point them out!

Reviews

[~Qu33n B~]

O! I am so sorry. This poem is very well writren, and I'm glad that you expressed your feelings so fluidly. I hav no idea why he turned u down. You seem like a great person! =) Well, he probably wasn't even the right one anyway. It happens to all of us. Great writing! Whanx a bunch for posting!

~Qu33n B Cullen~

[chloe cruz]

Oh.... I'm really sorry he said no, you sound great! This poem was really well written, and I couldn't see any disastrous mistakes... (Which there isn't.) I liked this a lot, and like I said before, sorry about his-saying-no. It must have been humiliating, but I guess we all have to be turned down at least once, right? Anyway good job, thanks for posting!

~Chloe

By the way, marvelous flow!

[Laoidhigh Uilleag]

I didn't see major mistakes and it seemed to flow pretty well...
I can relate to most this so much since i felt like doing all of these things above. I could never get the courage to tell the guy I like since its unstable to say if he's str8 or not anymore...
Even though the dreams crashed down in the end I like how you explained your vision of what you'd do up to there and at the dance.