Sonnet 1

Wrote this for school, couldn't come up with a title.

You ask if I’ll listen to your sad song.

You ask me what I would do in your place.

Slowly, you look up, show your tear streaked face.

Tell me the tale that’s bothered you so long.

You tell me how they treat you, so, so, wrong.

Your problems, they are intricate, like lace.

You say you want to leave without a trace;

so that the pain you have will not prolong.

 

 

Rejoice, break free; show them your true glory.

You’re confined. You’re trapped, caught in their cages.

Hush, don’t worry. It will all be okay.

Let me listen to your somber story.

You can spill your heart onto the pages.

Do not worry darling, cry the night away.

Author's Note

Not my best work, but i haven't uploaded anything in awhile. I wrote this for English.

Reviews

[DarkLovingRaven]

I'm baffled how 15 people have seen this and no one has yet commented.

I would like to say that this is very moving. It's actually beautiful. Everything flows naturally, your grammar is fine, you chose excellent words to depict what you're trying to say. LOVE it. Great job!

[The Invisible Girl]

I love this!! The words flow beautifully together. Great job! Can't wait to read more of your work!!

[Patrick Henry]

Wow, Taylor. First, you have started with 14 lines. Haven't seen that yet on here. : ) Thank goodness, 'cause it was nice to see!! Very brave to go by way of C,D,E,C,D,E A good tough beginning to any Sonnet write. A very moving poem. I loved it!! You would have had me, perfectly, if you hit the rhythm in the lines Da-Dum, Da-Dum, Da-Dum etc.... This poem, love your others, had me subscribing to you. I love Sonnets. I want to Thank You for having me find this. : ) Beautiful Taylor. xoxo -Mark

[Persephone Blum]

"Rejoice, break free; show them your true glory."
Beautiful!

[Eileen]

I absolutely loved the second verse. Again, formatting could use work.

[closed..acct]

I relly loved this write,
You are very talented.
I agree it amazes me how one gets so many looks
and so few reviews.
This is wonderful!