Are We Enemies?

Are We Enemies?

A Poem by 20 Locks-Hustla Extraordinaire

Liam, I thought we were friends

From beginning to end but

Lately you seem strange and distant

Your kisses don’t taste the same

And you can’t look me in the eye

When you touch those places

In me that only lovers do

 

Don’t put an ocean between us

Or exile me to an island secluded

In quiet desperation I wait for you

Without hesitation I take you

In the hopes that you and I might be

Allies

 

Liam, tell me how do you live

With the shadow of her inside?

The bond is broken but yet she stays

Weaving a web to keep you captive

Is there something that I’ve missed?

An elusive last piece of the puzzle

That I just can’t seem to find?

 

Don’t put an ocean between us

Or exile me to an island secluded

In quiet desperation I wait for you

Without hesitation I take you

In the hopes that you and I might be

Allies

 

Please tell me this is all my imagination

I want to believe every word you say

It’s getting harder with each and every day

Chase the shadows of the past away

Tell me that you want to be my friend

And not my enemy, and stay, in my heart

Forever….sweet love please stay.

 

Liam let the ghosts have peace

And come stay with me

I need you in my life

Come please stay

 

Don’t put an ocean between us

Or exile me to an island secluded

In quiet desperation I wait for you

Without hesitation I take you

In the hopes that you and I might be

Allies

Sweet love please stay…


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© 2018 20 Locks-Hustla Extraordinaire


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Amazing poetry dear Anastasia.
"Liam let the ghosts have peace
And come stay with me
I need you in my life
Come please stay"
I liked the complete poem and the above lines. Perfect use of words and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


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well written
so sad and true

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The sadness and longer speaks very loudly here.

If you are looking for ideas for improvement, I might reduce the number of metaphors and focus on a few strong ones.

For example the spiderweb and island are strong, but the puzzle piece feels out of place.

Evokes and conveys Strong emotion.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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20 Locks-Hustla Extraordinaire

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your words of encouragement, dear Shannon. xxx
don`t put an ocean between us,communication in a relationship is crucial

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Filled with so much emotion. I could feel the passion through this whole read. Well done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Spiritually delicate writing telling a story. Those last four lines are beautiful. I really enjoyed reading this. Nice job

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ghosts of lovers past indeed. I felt the emotion behind it. Nice.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Hey it's good with a meaning filled with struggling emotions...:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Liam..What have you done?

That's a very good poem, and very meaningful. We shouldn't let people drown us in our own ocean of sadness or put us in an isolated island.
If Liam puts you on an isolated island, make that island a jungle.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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I find this one extremely beautiful...Exquisite expression. Rich in imagery. Love the way you started it, it grabbed me by the arm and didn't release me even after the last verse. Keep sharing your art :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


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