Raw

Raw

A Poem by yashsickle
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Hit me

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Disbelieving fear steer clear of the near end of life itself climbing through the cracks of self esteem collapsing inwards into a dream like a pipe releasing steam our hate demands to gleam rip the seem to destroy the boy that became you for you to understand the clue and shoe of a perfect being seeing believing all knowing river flowing to the end where no letters can send.

© 2012 yashsickle


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Yes! This is the longest single thought I've ever read! It seems to be an attempt to make positive a gloomy thought. Yet this is too much of a dream sensation to be a waking thought. In that, the message is.... What? ...lol

This is a nice exercise in poetry metrics. Thanks.

Posted 7 Years Ago


simplistic and a perfect piece, hard to read there!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You might want to make a few separations in edits, but this was a nice flow but a little unclear.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 14, 2012
Last Updated on September 30, 2012
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Ann Arbor, MI



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