Fake

Um... Yea... I don't know what to say. I'm a fake, does that work? Just read the poem, I guess.... I want feedback. It'd be nice if you would tell me what you think.

Give me thoughts
Give me pain
Give me fear,
I'm not afraid.
Give me all that you want,
Give me all of your pain,
I'm a fake
And I shall devour,
Leave you still,
Without any power.
You're my demon
In my wake,
All you want to do is take,
But I shall devour,
I shall be the one to take.
I am not real,
This is all fake.
So it seems
So it seems,
But do you really see
It isn't me at all,
It is you,
Fake and oh so small.
Yes I shall devour you,
Take apart your soul,
For not only are you fake,
Your lies,
They make me whole.

Reviews

[The fallen of innocence]

you have a raw talent in writing brittany. very few writers have such skill as you. all original and nicely written.........just what i expected from you....there is truth in all the poems you write so don't give up on such a wonderful talent that you have :3

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extreamely beautiful...not fake at all this poem!(:
your flow is amazing and you incrusted the word fake so well in this poem!