UNDONE

UNDONE

A Poem by timthy
"

When the weight of the world is crushing you

"

The more time

That I spend by myself

Alone and sublime

I need no one  else

Breaking the skin

Cut open for fun

Fraying from within

Becoming undone

Not close to the brink

Already fallen down

Further into abyss I sink

This masked smile , a frown

Anger and animosity

Rage, vengeance, and hate

A never ending atrocity

Does self loathing create

Whatever does not kill me

Does nothing but leave an itch

Supposedly stronger, I should be

But left a bitter son of a b***h

All  of the stars have  aligned

The transformation has begun

A perfect monster by design

For I have become UNDONE...

© 2014 timthy


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Not too shabby. Flows logically into a well set up ending.

Very bitter, but, bitter writing cab be the best writing sometimes.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I know this feeling well. This could be a heavy metal ballad with music. You write amazing lines.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

timthy

10 Years Ago

thank u sis!

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Added on February 9, 2014
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timthy
timthy

coloniial heights, VA



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I am a sagittarius, I write based on ultimate highs and surrealistic lows. I usually don't cover the middle ground. Not pessimistic, not optimistic, just REALISTIC. I look forward to critiques, and be.. more..

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