Run

Run

A Poem by potato

Did you run?
When it got tough,
And you were out of luck,
Cause the going got rough?

Did you run?
Because you were all alone,
And you got scared,
And began to moan?

Did you run?
Because he gave you a new scar,
Or you couldn't hid the bruise?
Because you won't get very far.

Did I run?
Because of his s**t,
And everything else,
Including one last hit?

I did not run.

© 2014 potato


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I tend run away from a lot mentally and physically and I honestly did enjoy this poem it was beautiful keep writing :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


This piece can easily bring the reader deep into it's theme and clearly understand it's voice. The word choice was not the best in a few places though. All the same, a well written work of art.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Nice flow, sad topic. I just ran a couple weeks ago myself.

Posted 6 Years Ago


wow... very good! very descriptive, and entertaining. thank you for posting this

Posted 6 Years Ago


Hello there!

Is it weird to comment on a piece that's a month old? I hope not..

I really liked how you chose to set up this poem--the rhyming scheme is very sound (and I don't mean to be picky, but did you mean "hide" in stanza three, line three?). Besides the technicalities of it, the content is very candid and it must have taken a lot of heart to write this! Honest works are always the most powerful and this was no exception!

Thank you for sharing this poem!

MusicManiac

Posted 6 Years Ago


Good. Only problem is the third line I think you meant were but it says where. Other than that it is great.

Posted 6 Years Ago



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Added on August 4, 2014
Last Updated on August 5, 2014
Tags: run, scared, scar, bruise, luck, tough, rough

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potato
potato

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