Realization

Realization

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Composed in Free Verse..

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Realization

Not a moment too soon
or a moment too late,
as if the night spoke
whispering softly,
and I finally realized …

what I should have all along,
how the last shred of hope 
I was hanging by
was merely
a glimmer, a spark, 
keeping me alive.

I went as far as believing
Luna would cast her spell,
and you'll fall back
into the cocoon of my arms;
that stars
would sprinkle their dust,
lighting a pathway to
relive our moments.

This,
and, maybe, it's a fact
you're not as gone
as I think;
that you'll appear
within the span of
a firefly's wink.

As I breathed,
hoping it was not to be
that I'd find an eternal distance
between us,
that even if I want you
a gap would remain
uncovered.

Yet, my breath's shallow,
thin as where
air and water meet,
here, where I am ...
choking back tears 
in this moment's realization
that you've finally gone,
not even looking back,
never to return....!


© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay


Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
So, this is probably the first piece I wrote in Free Verse which Richard taught me :)

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Luna does cast her spell at times, but her light also exposes reality. That moment of realization, and acceptance of the truth is heartbreakingly sung in these beautiful words. Excellent flow throughout the poem, like a sigh of resignation. We all have that one unforgettable love in our lives, often it is lost. And it sometimes takes a lifetime to accept it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Yes, so true. I feel it's really like a relapse. You realize it but still want to go back..
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I adore Free-Verse poetry. ;)

I like the reference to the moon in its Latin form, Luna. It's beautifully sad, the imagery capturing that "Hopeful Sadness" in an evocative and delightful way. I like the image you chose for this poem, quite appropriate.

Overall, very well done, Kay! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Lovecraft! I like free verse too 😉 I'm glad you liked this one 😊
Realizations mostly leave us in deep thoughts and sadness. Beautifully expressed yourself I liked it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

You're right, they do..
Thank you for your thoughts, Najam! I'm glad you liked it 😊
Najam Us Saher

4 Years Ago

You're welcome ☺
I love this poem, Yumna!! I love the picture too. This is amazing! It feels like we're reading from a whole new Yumna :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Gullia, thank you so much! You're always kind in your appreciations of my work 😊
It's lik.. read more
mmmm so hauntingly beautiful yumna...

Yet, my breath's shallow,
thin as where
air and water meet,
here, where I am ...
choking back tears
in this moment's realization
that you've finally gone,
not even looking back,
never to return....!

you have captured the feeling of being breathless in these above lines...
i could read it again and again and still feel there is lot more to it...
felt each of these lines spoke to me..

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Ahem yes you can say that 😉
Ardra

4 Years Ago

i dint meant to suggest anything else :)
just that we share the same emotional roller coaster.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Oh I know what you meant lol I agree to that 😉 don't worry we're all a bit mad hahahaha😂😂
This is a thought that continues as you walk through it towards a peaceful longing place perhaps. Extremely well written. I am reminded of water flowing downwards as I read this. It is so often what thoughts can feel like. I enjoyed reading it immensely.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

That's an interesting comparison! Thank you for your thoughts here. Truly appreciate it 😊
It's beautiful, well penned....sadness occupied by realised happiness....
I liked it...:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Quite a summary! Thank you for your appreciation, Surya! I'm glad you liked it :)
This is truly a lovely piece of writing my lady, " A firefly's wink.... Genius!!!. Thank you for sharing this wonderful write

Poeticme

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Poeticme! I'm glad you liked it 😊
Your free verse is beautiful. This poem is very well written. You can hear and feel the fear and sadness in your writing. This is excellent writing, it flows lightly, giving the reader hope and coming to the the fateful conclusion that all is lost.
Thank you for your fine poetry.
Many Blessings,
Richie b.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your beautiful thoughts and appreciation, Richieb! I'm glad you liked it 😊
Flow is beautiful. Very nicely penned. Thanks for sharing :-D

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Sasha! I appreciate your words 😊
This is quite lovely. The font image and even the font colour add an ambience to it. Very nicely done. R xo

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Ray! I'm glad you liked it. Much humbled by your appreciation :)

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