Realization

Realization

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Composed in Free Verse..

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Realization

Not a moment too soon
or a moment too late,
as if the night spoke
whispering softly,
and I finally realized …

what I should have all along,
how the last shred of hope 
I was hanging by
was merely
a glimmer, a spark, 
keeping me alive.

I went as far as believing
Luna would cast her spell,
and you'll fall back
into the cocoon of my arms;
that stars
would sprinkle their dust,
lighting a pathway to
relive our moments.

This,
and, maybe, it's a fact
you're not as gone
as I think;
that you'll appear
within the span of
a firefly's wink.

As I breathed,
hoping it was not to be
that I'd find an eternal distance
between us,
that even if I want you
a gap would remain
uncovered.

Yet, my breath's shallow,
thin as where
air and water meet,
here, where I am ...
choking back tears 
in this moment's realization
that you've finally gone,
not even looking back,
never to return....!


© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay


Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
So, this is probably the first piece I wrote in Free Verse which Richard taught me :)

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Luna does cast her spell at times, but her light also exposes reality. That moment of realization, and acceptance of the truth is heartbreakingly sung in these beautiful words. Excellent flow throughout the poem, like a sigh of resignation. We all have that one unforgettable love in our lives, often it is lost. And it sometimes takes a lifetime to accept it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Yes, so true. I feel it's really like a relapse. You realize it but still want to go back..
T.. read more



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The style, presentation, flow and feel, all are there in this craft. The title is justified. This is the best of your writes I have read so far.
Very well done. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Wow, thank you for such a great compliment! I'm really glad you liked this one, Bala! Means a lot to.. read more
It took me a long time to be able to write freeverse. I found syllable count and rhyme much easier. You nailed this one - I can't believe it is your first. The rhythm is wonderful, the content lovely - I love the firefly's wink (I wish I had written that). Simply beautiful. :) Julie

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Ahh I can not take credit for the 'firefly's wink', it was Richard's idea 😉
Thank you so .. read more
I would have to agree with your mentor and say that you were the owner of a deeply metaphorical free verse pen before your tutelage under him Yumna. I remember a fine metaphorical free verse titled 'Glassless windows.'
Well done here - again.
;p

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Lmao I had to read this 3 times to understand what you said 😂😂😂
In that case I woul.. read more
Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

3 times !?!
Ah well you got there in the end...or was it at the start...ugh ..now I'm confus.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Lol lol now you've confused me 👊😂
My favorite so far. I do feel a progression in your writing as I read this beautifully crafted piece. It such a natural flow like a power river around a bend slows to control. The conveyance of a troubled heart in the yearning to understanding comes through in the well thought analogies.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

I would give more credit to Richard than myself in the progression of my writing as you call it 😊.. read more
I really like this piece! You convey the agony perfectly! I also really enjoy the color of the font, it gave it a soft undertone, nicely done friend!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kesha

4 Years Ago

Thats awesome! I just finished a new piece :) about to post it!
Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Looking forward to reading it 😊
Kesha

4 Years Ago

Thanks :) posted ;) it's alright :P
Yumna,
I cannot tell you how pleased I am to be credited with your first Free Verse, but I must decline the honor, M'Dear, as most all of your pieces are written in the Free Verse style, and all I've really done is give a hand with structure, grammar, and a sprinkling of metaphor.
To compose excellent Free Verse (or any form of poetry) one has to possess adequate potential, creative imagination, and heart, which you're filled to overflowing with it.
This is why you'll accomplish anything poetical you set your mind to.
Take this beautifully-rendered, magical work of romantically tender, poignancy … it virtually oozes with heart-gripping, mind's-eye, enchantment, that sweeps and holds the reader captive in its aura from first to last word, and the presentation and picture selection set the perfect mood to wrap us up with you in your wistful tale of melancholy, as fine poetry's always prone to do.
You can't blame me for this … LOL!

To have had any part in being there to assist you is pleasure beyond and above the gorgeous poem dancing upon this page before me … thank you, Yumna, for blessing an humble bard in such a graciously rewarding manner! ⁓ Richard : )

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Richard, my pieces may have been in free verse but not in the metaphorical sense. But this one here .. read more
Richard 🍃

4 Years Ago

It is my deepest joy and honor to serve … thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully, Yumna! : )
I really like your poem...and free verse is very good.
Cute painting :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Atashusi! I'm glad you liked it :)
I didn't paint it lol ;P

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