Rain on me

Rain on me

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental. Sensual write...

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Rain on me, your azure eyes.

Together we experience, 
a blitheful feeling; tantalizing ... 
I see stars crinkle around 
the corner of your eyes 
when my virgin lips 

breathe out your name.
Saturated, your vastness falls 
in circles; pounding.
We are oblivious to the existence 
of the universe we inhabit as

your azure eyes rain on me. ..


© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay


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This is meant to be sensual- and it is in the holistic sense of the word- one that touches the senses, not just the corporeal but also the spiritual. True acts and feelings of affection and connection can arouse such sensations and your poetry has evoked the same. Cheers!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words, Mallika. I'm glad you feel that way about my piece ((:



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Very passionate write love the title metaphoric sounds:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating. Glad you like it :)
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2 Years Ago

Welcome I did very much:)
This is meant to be sensual- and it is in the holistic sense of the word- one that touches the senses, not just the corporeal but also the spiritual. True acts and feelings of affection and connection can arouse such sensations and your poetry has evoked the same. Cheers!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words, Mallika. I'm glad you feel that way about my piece ((:
it's amazing what/ how eyes effect and affect and tears; well they have a chemistry and philosophy all of their own.

And I liked the connotations too

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Aye, so they do... thank you once again, for appreciating. Glad you like it (:
Gazing into another's eyes vibrates those good feelings in the heart. The world disappears and they're all that is.

Well written.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely words and for appreciating, Relic 😊
A lovely, cute and very engaging write Yumna...
"virgin lips" hmm, interesting :DD
Well done, keep it up! :))


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you like it 😊
I will say one thing... Your presentation style couples quite nicely with the romantic sense of writing... I liked it, good job.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

That's a lovely compliment. Thank you for appreciating, D. Glad you like it 😊
DylanChase

3 Years Ago

Aye, no problemo... Have you thought of using this style for a suspense type poem/story? Could be in.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Suspense? Hmm interesting idea. I'll think about it ;) thanks again 😊
Beautiful and amazing use of words dear friend. I liked the tone and the joy in the words. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Coyote. Glad you like it (:
Coyote Poetry

3 Years Ago

You are welcome dear friend.
What a genteel but sensual huddle of honeyed words, Yumna! Methinks the moment might have come in discovering your natural genre. What it is, is for you to decide. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Ah, thank you for the kind words, Em. I'm still not sure of that so I'm gonna keep trying till then .. read more
emmajoy

3 Years Ago

Hush... the wording is lovely, subtle yet.. inviting without being too much so. Beautiful, sweet pe.. read more
I know you are much too young to know Quadrophenia Rock Opera by The Who, but your lovely poem reminds me of one of the songs. Lyrical, sensual, ethereal- The first line is amazing"Rain on me "your azure eyes"- stunning. Good rhythm and flow and musicality. If you expanded this, it would be a great song...Love this!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

I'll be sure to check it out then :)
Thank you so much for appreciating, Annette. I'll try t.. read more

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