Victory (?)

Just an idea I had in my head. Very roughly penned. Might by working on this later still.

Like a moth to the flame. Or so she was told. Everyone basked in her reflected light. And she quite enjoyed the sparks - dancing - momentarily around her, thinking that she was the center of it all. And maybe she was, until - the moth caught fire and she saw the wings burn. Savouring over her victory [unbeknownst till then] - the flame gave one last hiccup before extinguishing ... for good.

~~~ Whose victory? ~~~

Reviews

[emmajoy]

'.. until - the moth caught fire and she saw the wings burn.'

Happens. Tis so easy for someone, woman or man, to bask in things wonderful, become too complacent, take rather than give or share. Advantage taken away, thrown to the hungry wolves of had-enough.

Your writing goes from gentle steps to bounds, Yumna.. there is an undercurrent these days. Perhaps life has a hand in that, dear friend and ally in words!!

First class thoughts birthed from - awareness of how to.. .. 'Whose victory?' - indeed. Is it better to delve and dam emotions or let them flow freely?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You so hit on point with your analysis of this write, Em. I would say it depends on how much important it is to let the emotions flow free.. I think some emotions are better shelved off rather than let out...

Thank you so much for your insight here, dear friend. Always appreciated (:

[emmajoy]

Has, is and always will be a pleasure (and lesson) to read your poetry.

[Carol Cashes]

Sounds like someone reflecting on how quickly youth and beauty last - a moth's lifetime, a "candle in the wind" so to speak.

Compact, concise, complete. Nicely done.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's a nice interpretation. Thank you for appreciating, Carol :)

[ROXANE DORSEY]

We all have the victory, as we breathe. I love this poem. Nice work Doc.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating, Roxane. Glad you do 😊