Dimensions

Experimental. Afternoon scribbles.

I am young, they say; full of life and meaning.

Yet, when I look back, my reflection's pallid;

my stare is that of death.

 

I lift weights unseen, unbidden.

Striving, every day a gentle reminder

to remain calm.

My head throbs but my lips,

oh they smile, plastered ...

until the muscles around my face ache.

I am speechless yet my laugh sounds cynical.

 I freeze with my looks. Stripped bare,

I clutch at the corners of my heart, ready to flip;

it swings ~ in unspeakable dimensions.

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

How you carry us into the deeper places of you, of your mind, your thoughts that whisper through you as your eyes swallow whole the world. I can sense you there, these masks of light trying to cover the darker pathways of your being. Extraordinary transparency, dear poet.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your words here, Craig. Sometimes, it's relief to write out the darker thoughts within...
Glad you appreciate 😊

[An owl on the moon]

Ah, I understand, dear Yumna. Sometimes I have to go into the dark spaces to remember the light. 😊

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I love this
Loved the verse with the head and smiles

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating, Juliespenhere. Glad you like it :)

[Wondering Mind]

poignant poetry. I wish I could express as well as you

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Wondering Mind. That's a very humbling compliment. Glad you appreciate :)

[emmajoy]

' Stripped bare,.. .. .. .. I clutch at the corners of my heart'

How physical appearance, mood, spirit is portrayed depends on choice. Too often we hide selves, then erect facades that can so easily become permanent. There are few who can honestly declare this is me.. complete, real. Tis fear, history perhaps and oft times loneliness that freeze the spirit.

We make ourself malleable.. perhaps. Such an honest write.. and painful too.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Sometimes it becomes a necessity to hide self, though relieving at times to let our guard down... read moreSometimes it becomes a necessity to hide self, though relieving at times to let our guard down...
Thank you so much for your thoughts here, Em. I agree, we are what we make out ourselves to be...

[emmajoy]

Have slightly edited my words, forgive, put this and that in such a climsy way.. a poor response to your finely laid words.

[emmajoy]

climsy = clumsy..!! ( How i manage to type and be paid for it sometimes, don't know.)

[Jibey]

Heavy thoughts on a hot afternoon!

Ah, the weights, and the plaster... puling down and covering up. Ah, the stripping and the bare exposure...hot and cold, here and there, up and down, beating time - as the hands move...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Quite the opposite, Jibey, it's winter here lool 😉
Thank you so much for your words here. Appreciated :)

[Matthew Kult]

The many layers of existence sometimes is faced with with the lies of an unbreakable mask. Hiding deep within the sorrows of the struggle yet the shell and masks speak untruths.

Always and with love

Jayden D.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your thoughts here, Jayden. Appreciated :-)

[Matthew Kult]

You are most welcome

[Sami Khalil]

Multi-dimensional introspection of life, reality and love. We are reminded to remain calm albeit the confusion and turmoil within and all around us. Find a way, meaning and a purpose. Excellent...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your insight here and for appreciating. I agree with your words :-)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[Coyote Poetry]

Life is a odd journey. We will always learn and test life. Many places we shall know and we will change our life and view often.
"it swings ~ in unspeakable dimensions."
The above. True and necessary. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It def is odd, we continue adding on to our experiences... Thank you so much for appreciating and your thoughts here, Coyote. Glad you like it 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy dear friend and you are welcome.

[Asante]

"but my lips,
oh they smile, plastered ...
until the muscles around my face ache."

Couldn't get any more raw than that with this one, Yumna. Those lines hit me hardest because of how relatable they are. I genuinely love what this write was turned into. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, guess you know now how weirdly written my pieces are at first haha
Thank you so much for appreciating and relating to this write, Asante. (:

[jacob erin-cilberto]

introspection at its finest....what others see is not the real me---
the weight of confusion, of loneliness of feeling disconnected...i can mask that for others...
i put on a good show----but if only they knew.

j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think we all do, only a matter of time before that mask falls off... Thank you so much for your words here, Jacob. Appreciated 😊