If I Die Tonight

If I Die Tonight

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Spontaneous write.

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If I Die Tonight

And if I die tonight,
I will remember 
the places you touched, 
the folds on your skin.

and I will rise 
in the tumult of day 
when you whisper my name.

With a glazed smile 
lingering upon my lips, 
my thoughts will float
if I die ~ tonight.


© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay


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If you died tonight; I'd be so sad so don't you ever die, yumna hahaha. You know what I like to call this type of poetry? Mom poetry ;) nevermind me ignore that hahahaha! Idk, I'm probably over thinking this but this is making me kinda sad. Either it's the thought of you dying or the jealousy of who you originally wrote this for. Hmmmmmmmmm jk!!!! :P nice one. Thumbs up. Applause. Yeet.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

:P well, you do know me and that I don't write like this anymore ;) but oh, I'll have to remember wh.. read more
Saree Marcel

2 Years Ago

Hahahaha ;) I know :P



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Hello Yumna!

I really missed your romantic and delicate poems.
Fortunately, today, I had the chance to read this sweet-tempered and electrifying poem of yours.

The significance of the poem is very well chosen and presented. I also like the way you choosed the writing style.

I spotted only two grammar mistakes and I will rectify them for you:
"The folds OF your skin"
"In the tumult of THE day"

Your verses are comparable to the verses of the song "Don't cry" by Guns N' Roses, which is a very delightful thing.

I didn't have much to say as a result of my gladness to read this poem.

Good luck! Never stop!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jes' Pi

3 Years Ago

My pleasure!
Oh, well, I'm sorry, haha. It is still a good poem and I am really glad that I h.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

nah, no need to say sorry, sweetie :* I appreciate your feedback very much :))
Jes' Pi

3 Years Ago

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BBP
Beautiful as always. You’re poetry reads so soft and smooth.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

That's so nice to know you feel that way about my pieces. Thank you so much for appreciating, Bev! H.. read more
You have masterfully crafted the universal idea of appreciating what's in front of us, becuz we could die at any moment, using so few words to paint a complete idea. Nicely sensual, as well as deeply meaningful! *smile* Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely review, BG! Glad you appreciate :)
Another heart-touching poem from you. So sincere and humble. Perhaps the greatest example of love, thinking of another as we drift away.

I always enjoy reading your work. It's so authentic.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

That's such a humbling praise! Thank you so much for appreciating, Robert. I always try to be (:
had to read this as soon as i read the title Doc!!! its a subject that should be as common among us humans as talk of work, family, friends, dreams, births, celebrations etc etc etc.
ohhhhhhhhhhhh and such beauty in this romance ..i absolutely love this ... the title so integral to the poem ..and your words flow as smoothly as the love between these two you describe ..lovely lovely lovely read for me!!
E.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Ah, I'm glad you like it, my friend! I was afraid this piece would be taken as suicidal...
I.. read more

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