Absence

Absence

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Spontaneous write. Inspired.

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I wake,
as the sun glares
in your absence;

a gaping hole,
ever increasing
in my chest

and as pieces of me
scatter
along the way,


my lips forgot
to smile ...


© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay


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This place of absence is pure agony, dear poet. It is as if the sunlight came to barren, dry roots, and the light only took away the breath from your soul. This is when I hope such pain is only divine creativity flowing through you and not scars of experience speaking.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Often enough, my darker sides take hold of me, that is where this piece derives from too... Thank yo.. read more
An owl on the moon

3 Years Ago

May you always find those gathered near you who love the light of you, and the darkness of you too. .. read more



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I haven't felt like this for years, but I have felt it, and understand the agony of being alone when your soul is away with the one you love. That absence is painful. Can remember clock watching until he returned. A lovely piece of brevity Yumna.

Chris

Posted 7 Months Ago


This poem doesn't sound like a sentiment that would come from you, but many poets express such a feeling of emptiness at someone's absence. As I recall much of your writing that I've read, I see you as a person who wouldn't be emotionally dependent on another person to a great degree. So I find it interesting for you to write a poem like this & it reminds me to try to tackle viewpoints that are not mine. It's a great test for a writer's empathy! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago


This place of absence is pure agony, dear poet. It is as if the sunlight came to barren, dry roots, and the light only took away the breath from your soul. This is when I hope such pain is only divine creativity flowing through you and not scars of experience speaking.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Often enough, my darker sides take hold of me, that is where this piece derives from too... Thank yo.. read more
An owl on the moon

3 Years Ago

May you always find those gathered near you who love the light of you, and the darkness of you too. .. read more
few words, yet You convey the emotions deeply as they should be... I believe that's the specialty about Your style and pen, few words, yet the emotions strong and emotive, let it be, sadness or pain, tender longing or dreaming... well done my friend!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

You are always so generous in your reviews, dear friend. Humbles me every time. .. Thank you so much.. read more
lightsong

3 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend, I always try to be honest but kind :)
No doubt about it
When less is more
Good just got better
A splendid little work of poetic art................Neville

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words, Neville. Appreciated :)
Neville

3 Years Ago

Pleasure............Neville
You write with amazing feeling - whether sad, whether happy, you know exactly how. ' .. my lips forgot to smile ... ' So wish whether gift or truth, these word had a happier ending. Hugs, as always.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Sometimes I do voice what I truly feel and it comes out in bouts of spontaneity like this... thank y.. read more
lips that have no contact with our loved one...they tend to turn the smile upside down.
j.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

Nicely worded. Thank you, Jacob.
That feeling of that missing part- our soul longs and searches for- never stop believing- miracles happen when we believe and the puzzle becomes whole when we least expect- wonderful words 🌹

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Years Ago

I like your thoughts here and the way you interpreted this piece. Thank you so much for reading and .. read more

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