A State of Being (Senryu)

A State of Being (Senryu)

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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An observation mainly. My first senryu written (which I'm satisfied enough to post here lol)

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Beauty is not seen,
rather felt, a state of being 
content within self.


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When I was younger, I felt that I was hideous in every sense of the word because I had made a horrible horrible mistake and refused to forgive myself for years. And for that duration of years I met many people who would say I'm beautiful because I was so honest, especially with myself, and entirely unforgiving. It was strange and it was history, but it was a raw state of being that people around me took as like a fresh breath of air in a room full of pretty - lying - faces. I always refused their compliments though, telling them I wasn't what they thought I was, but now I just accept it. If being honest makes a person beautiful, being raw, then I'd say that's what poetry has allowed me to be. I'm still not entirely comfortable being called beautiful (at all) but I would agree in a heartbeat that poetry, practically all poets, are beautiful. In the way they are content in expressing themselves, through living their state of being unashamed.
Brilliant haiku. I enjoyed this as much as I related to it. Hope you don't mind my earlier ramble.
Keep writing and take care,
- Lavi

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I do get how you feel and totally relate to it, having felt like this often though I learned not to .. read more


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This is perfect. You talk about the beauty that lies within. I truly liked this very much.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for reading this one, Najam. Glad you like it :))
Najam Us Saher

1 Year Ago

You're welcome :)
You are right my dear friend. Wise people look inside another eyes and they can see kindness or struggle. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

If only everyone did...
thank you too for your words here. Appreciated as always :)
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Fitting such a large truth into such a small space can be difficult, but you did it with great beauty. Loved this!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I'm not confident enough to really write haiku and the thing with writing within a set structure (I'.. read more
I remember years ago, I was Mingling , a and the room had a variety of people, my age and older, everyone was trying to be witty, intelligent, women were trying to be sexy, men were trying to be suave, some were showing their importantance, etc. then in walks a lady, and I write lady because she was a LADY in all respects, dressed nicely, wearing her hair elegantly, walked like a woman who knew she was a woman, spoke with a very feminine charm, had a smile that I would never forget, and just plain pleasant, I felt no physical spark, just a feeling of uncontrollable respect for this person, and she was at least 30 years older than me, as a 20 something old man who had raging hormones to deal with, she captured my attention. OH sure there were a few younger beauties in the room, but they did not have anything on her and in a way I think they knew it. Every man was drawn to this lady, and she didn't even try to bring attention to herself, Beauty is definitely projected from the inside.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Yes, that is exactly what I tried to convey. Thank you for sharing your thoughts here, Peter. Apprec.. read more
Both an observational statement & a perfectly structured haiku worthy of posting anywhere.... N





Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating this one, Neville 😊
Neville

1 Year Ago

my pleasure...N
When I was younger, I felt that I was hideous in every sense of the word because I had made a horrible horrible mistake and refused to forgive myself for years. And for that duration of years I met many people who would say I'm beautiful because I was so honest, especially with myself, and entirely unforgiving. It was strange and it was history, but it was a raw state of being that people around me took as like a fresh breath of air in a room full of pretty - lying - faces. I always refused their compliments though, telling them I wasn't what they thought I was, but now I just accept it. If being honest makes a person beautiful, being raw, then I'd say that's what poetry has allowed me to be. I'm still not entirely comfortable being called beautiful (at all) but I would agree in a heartbeat that poetry, practically all poets, are beautiful. In the way they are content in expressing themselves, through living their state of being unashamed.
Brilliant haiku. I enjoyed this as much as I related to it. Hope you don't mind my earlier ramble.
Keep writing and take care,
- Lavi

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I do get how you feel and totally relate to it, having felt like this often though I learned not to .. read more
definitely it is much more on the inside than on the out----if we are content with ourselves, our relationships with others tend to be more "beautiful."

lots packed into your Senryu here.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I agree with your words. Thank you so much for your thoughts and for appreciating, Jacob.

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