Painting A New Sky

Painting A New Sky

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Ramblings.

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Once again, I find myself
gazing emptily at the moon,
my eyes feel vacant
even to my raging mind.

Each time, I'm touched
by the beauty of it,
as it captures and
consumes me in places.

I try, unsuccessfully, to
disremember certain things
and certain people. I have
a whole wall in the back
of my head where
 
each name just hangs
limp, dangling off its hinges,
threatening to fall off any minute.
The names oddly shine
on the plaque, one in particular.

Oblivion is a gift
bestowed upon me
by the night rider. ..


Once again, I find myself
painting a new sky.


© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay


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i can tell how you wrestled with this Doc. ..its fragmented direction and different take on the magic of moon glow is unsettling for me...never taken to strange disremembering places by her grace ;) have you tried putting this in poetic form instead of prose? it might help to trim and/or embellish the thing it is you are trying to get to ... i like the title and its repetition ... it helps put it all together in the sense of letting go and starting over ... beautiful empowerment in painting that new sky ... i am taking that with me today ;)
E.

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Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

it helps me to know where the poet wants lines to break and pause ... i love the names on hinges da.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

:D thanks again for making this lazy writer rewrite the first lousy attempt haha.
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago




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This is the top poem I've read in weeks! I love this. I relate to this so much! Just this morning, I was trying to stop grinding on a communique between myself & someone who grates on my nerves. I love the way you make this down-and-dirty bad habit of mine feel kind of artful . . . like, not so much a shame, as just a mere weakness. I am entranced by the moon, I've read & written many moon poems, but this is the most original & relatable & powerful that I can recall (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your lovely words here and for relating to this write, BG. I'm humbled. Hugs b.. read more
Hello Dr Y. Your posted image has much magnetic pull, as have your lines concerning moon gazing. Wonderful to contemplate its glory. Lovely lines here.

Chris

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating, Christine. Glad you like it :)
Painting a new sky... Hmm, when I saw that heading it got my attraction. Nice write

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much. Glad you appreciate :-)
We will need to paint a new sky often in a life.
"Once again, I find myself
painting a new sky."
I liked the complete poem. The above lines. Wonderful and thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I do agree. Thank you so much for appreciating, John :)
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I did enjoy and you are welcome my dear friend.
It's a beautiful and haunting poem at the same time.... the name plates hanging on the board.... loved that line...
As moon child whenever I look at the moon I am in awe of her beauty.... recently the full moon was very beautiful...
Nicely captured Yumna.. :)

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Somehow, I never look at the moon as 'her' ;P And yes, full moon is always so enchanting! :D thanks .. read more
' I have ~ a whole wall in the back ~ of my head where ~~ each name just hangs ~ limp, dangling off its hinges, ~ threatening to fall off any minute... ..

Was difficult to focus for a few seconds after that excerpt, because to me,it seems the core of your poem. As always, your words are specific, quite firmly set down, yet you've certainly expressed emotions and perhaps - decisions in this piece. Those final nine words shout change,

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Ah Emma, you do get the essence of this piece. I did try clearing my head off some things. I just ho.. read more
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Okay Lady, I feel like you ripped this out of my head, only worded it so much better than I would have.
I really enjoyed this one! Wrapped up a world of emotions in one piece.

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Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you relate to this one, Bev. Thank you so much for appreciating :))
Night riders eh? So the Ku Klux Klan gave you the gift of oblivion. Lmao. Jk. Couldn't resist. :P

Thumbs up.

I find it ironic that this is a poem about you being lost in your head but I love how your picture looks like she's glancing at her watch.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Ah, I wish. ..
I like to think that the girl in the picture has a watch which tells how much .. read more
i can tell how you wrestled with this Doc. ..its fragmented direction and different take on the magic of moon glow is unsettling for me...never taken to strange disremembering places by her grace ;) have you tried putting this in poetic form instead of prose? it might help to trim and/or embellish the thing it is you are trying to get to ... i like the title and its repetition ... it helps put it all together in the sense of letting go and starting over ... beautiful empowerment in painting that new sky ... i am taking that with me today ;)
E.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

it helps me to know where the poet wants lines to break and pause ... i love the names on hinges da.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

:D thanks again for making this lazy writer rewrite the first lousy attempt haha.
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago


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