Around The Crinkle of Your Eyes

A little different from my previous writes (I think). Just a touch sensual.

The afternoon glows, vibrant,

coursing through my veins

in strange colours

and when last night seems

forever ago, I ache

for a night that never was.

And days on end drag,

dull, itching themselves

to make way for the night

where you are no longer

a mere passer-by of

my reveries

when you touch me

with your words in

places that never were.

I would make a home

around the crinkle

of your eyes; a home

that never was.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I like the way this is stated with a touch of ambivalence, right in the middle of longing. This narrator does not feel "all in" but he/she could be persuaded I'm guessing. I love the crinkle you write about & it kills me when people think that crinkles must be banished! *smile* Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I like your thoughts, although I'd say the narrator is very much persuaded already ;)
And oh, I'm kinda envious of the people who have those crinkles! But then I rarely laugh to have any :x
Thank you so much for appreciating, BG :)))

[barleygirl]

I didn't laugh most of my life. Getting old has been the most hilarious my life has been! *wink! wink!*

[Dr. YumnaKay]

In as much as I love life and everything in it, I don't see myself living up to an older age like you :x I think you're admirable in that regard though *hugs

[barleygirl]

I can read between the lines . . . of course you're going to do this with much more dignity, I'm sure! *smile*

[andrew mitchell]

Crows feet as we call them give so much character to the eyes in a sexy sort of way. nice writing , you are so productive! Enjoying the reads.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree! There's something about eyes which attracts lol :P
Thank you so much for reading, Andrew. Glad you enjoyed :)

[Verse]

Oh! I’m taking this as a favourite, Yumna! This just resonated. :):)

B

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That brightened my Sunday afternoon :D thank you so much for appreciating. Glad it resonated :-))

[Kelly Scheppers]

A touch of sensuality and melancholy can go a long way. This is the stuff that makes for curling up with a good book on a cold, frosty night. It warms the soul from the inside out, like a good cup of soup...but better. A dog eared page, for sure!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Your words make me smile. Thank you so much for reading :)))

[Chris Shaw]

Beautifully expressed Dr Y. There is much warmth in this very sensual piece of poetry. I very much enjoyed your lines.

Chris

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating, Christine. Glad you enjoyed :-))

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem for love shared.
"when you touch me
with your words in
places that never were."
Those eyes and sweet words. Can steal our mind and heart. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

So they do, indeed. ..thank you so much for reading and liking :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my dear friend.

[emmajoy]

Ahaaaa - things are afoot in a corner of your mind that, to date, has been locked, barred and bolted. Not asking but seems Spring has sprung a little early in your mind! Your language is refined yet released to the winds.. not sure where those winds are taking the words but... be sure, they will most definiely reach their destination!!

We should all have crinkles. THey show that our eyes have seen delight and - smiled at the view!.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Your words here made me smile :) Winter always has more of an effect on me than spring, maybe that's why ;)
Thank you so much for appreciating. x

[LazerRays]

You must really love this person a lot. The sadness and longing to be with this person is overwhelming. This is really emotional. You definitly had a lot on your mind while writing this. I really hope this all works out for you. Love is a complicated thing- and solving that maze is a huge barrier. I sincerely hope that labyrinth gets solved. Nice job yumna! I enjoyed reading this. :P

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Sometimes it's better to have it out than keep it in, I think..Thank you so much for your lovely words here, Sarah. Glad you enjoyed. x

[An owl on the moon]

There is a beautiful softness here, dear Yumna... yes... this is the loving that transforms everything in life, every shade and hue of the world shifts. May you find a solace and haven in that place, a deeper beauty of living only found by poets and falling stars that burn so bright in their dying.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your lovely words here, Craig. Made me smile. :-))

[An owl on the moon]

Ah, smiling is good.. and laughing even better. We'll get you those crinkles yet. Just you wait. :)

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

This was a breakfast buffet or a midnight munchy! It took me all the way through...with just that hint:)

[Neville]

that's enough waffle, and keep ya eyes of my sausage.. 'wink'

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah I love both of your comments :P thank you so much, Queenie :)) I'm glad you enjoyed.