Tangled Webs

Tangled Webs

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Inspired.

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Tangled Webs

What are the odds
of capturing petalled dreams,
trapped between tangled 
webs of tomorrow;

we walk on parallel lines
of fate, which keep
lengthening,
beckoning us forward,

and our ever-eager souls
seek out where ends meet
into one...

what are the odds
of sleeping peacefully tonight,
yet another one spent 
aimlessly tossing around;


the winds stifle a laugh 
as they mark my skin.


© 2019 Dr. YumnaKay


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What are the odds, that two people meant to be together will actually make it, or lose out again. There is a lot of angst here...a lot of what ifs...

Well written bit here, Doc and the last line is brilliant...with the right amount of ambiguity to throw a double entendre at the reader.

A good write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you felt that way, Ted. Thank you so much for your words here and for appreciating :)



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This is how I've felt lately with a new friend poignantly on my mind. I love how this poem feels like a sister to the last short poem by you that I reviewed just before this. I know you will relate to this -- being a control freak (me), I want to orchestrate what unfolds in my life, but sometimes pleasant aspects spill forth so unexpectedly, such a situation tosses me around with mirth. That's the sensation your poem gets across too (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

I like the way you took this piece. And yes, I'm certainly a control freak when it comes to things, .. read more
Even I feel inspired after reading this beautiful poem! I really liked that you started off with a question, spiked my curiousity. Capturing petalled dreams in the tangled webs conjures up such a pretty image.
Very nicely penned, indeed!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

I'm humbled. Thank you so much for appreciating and your lovely words :-)))
Wow this piece was absolutely stunning. I loved it. I myself have had many sleepless nights as of late. I can really relate to this. Wonderfully penned.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Ah, Kesha! Thank you so much for reading and appreciating this one. Glad to see you around here :-)).. read more
Kesha

1 Year Ago

You are very welcome! :)
A tangle web, if willing. Not a prison. A Black Widow web can be deadly for lover or not. I enjoyed your words and thoughts dear friend. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much, John. Glad you enjoyed :)
You're displaying a bit of your romantic side within each of these lines. You've trapped a bit of creativity within the web as well. Interesting poem, Dr.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Sometimes I do let my romantic side out a bit ;P
thanks so much for reading and appreciating.. read more
not tangled webs, tho beauty may be found therein, but rather wondrously woven dreams pon which to while away the night... nice one my friend.. very nice indeed, Neville :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your words here and for appreciating, Nev :))
Neville

1 Year Ago

always a pleasure and true :)
This is a beautifully crafted poem, wistful and delightful, expressing both hope and hopelessness, a sense of being adrift on a sea of uncertainties, with no chart to show the way to the harbour...

Are we simply the playthings of the gods? Maybe, maybe...

Is the tangled web we weave better than the lines thrown to us by Fate? Who knows?

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

playthings - hmm, I've thought over it, maybe we are, or we simply twist our lives ourselves and may.. read more
Tangled web of thoughts that prolong tossing and turning through sleepless nights.
Life is in fact a journey on parallel lines, still... the presence of fellow traveler along that length makes all the difference. Lovely writing perfect in every sense. Your style is absolutely beautiful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for the lovely review, Mrudula. I'm glad you appreciate :)
Beautifully agonizing in these transparent thoughts, the wishing, the wondering. The soul of your words reminded me of Serendipity, one of my favorite movies. How lives often pass, connect, and either wander apart or become in some ways tangled together forever. There are wishes here I hope find a way to awaken.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An owl on the moon

1 Year Ago

Only watch it if you like romantic comedies that are amazing and poignant. ;)
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

Oh, they're my second fav genre after mystery thrillers ;) so of course, I'm gonna watch it! :D
An owl on the moon

1 Year Ago

Haha! Then may you smile and laugh muchly! :D
"Yee-DOGGIES!"
I'm really digging that picture Doctor Kay … a LOT! 🙃
And, to follow with a question is sheer brilliance in gripping the reader's interest right-off.
I'd say the odds are in your favor, should you decide as tomorrows come nearer and you find them as appealing as your yesterdays' imagined yearnings that propelled your desires, wants, and needs.
Still, in the realm of dreams, we seldom ever know … as revealed by aimless tossing and snickering winds.

You know my love for well-written Free Verse, and this is about as good as it gets.
Thanks for the delightfully poignant treat! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

(here's the full message that was cut short)
From your new avatar,
I see you've decide.. read more
Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Actually,
Free Verse is not the only form you've written beautifully under my keen eye … do.. read more

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