Afterglow

Afterglow

A Poem by yusuf

There lies my diary! 

In the dark. 

Eyesore dwarfs crawls , 

on its golden pages.

They read my words ,

and sarcastically smile at me.

They laugh out loud ,

rolling on the floor.

They read.

They call me a looser ,

spit on my f*****g face.

They Call me a joker ,

a man without backbone.

I don't mind their words ,

but i just don't like the look in their eyes.

My heart is bleeding profusely;
it's blood or tears , i cannot tell.

The dwarfs have started to feel

the emotions;
Pure and Frrvolent.

behind my words.

Their face turned dimmed,

their smiles turned straight.

With watery eye ,

they hysterically turn pages,

to feel more of it.

They say such purity in words is rare.

They are shattered ,
shaken,and petrified.

They cry un-checked ,

their eyes bulging out of their socket;
flowing out with the tears.

And with their dying vision ,

they slit their throat and Die!

© 2012 yusuf


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I love this poem, and I can relate!

Posted 8 Years Ago


yusuf

8 Years Ago

I am glad you could , thank you so much!
Oh, this is really amazing and unique. I love the whole concept of the diary and dwarfs reading it. I actually have a diary with embarrassing secrets, that one day I'll look back and read it laughing my butt off. I also like how the dwarfs' reactions and feelings change throughout the poem, from laughing to crying. They could feel and connect with whatever you wrote down. Great job! Thoroughly impressed! :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;)

Posted 8 Years Ago


yusuf

8 Years Ago

Thank You so much! I am glad and honored by your visit! :)
Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect

8 Years Ago

You're very welcome! :)
This is not my style of reading, but you did write it well.

You wrote the word looser, it should be spelled loser. My only critique :)

~Erinne

Posted 8 Years Ago


yusuf

8 Years Ago

oops quite a blooper! Thank You so much! I will redress it! I am obliged by your honest review!
Erinne S.

8 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
A unique concept, well done. Keep writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


yusuf

8 Years Ago

Thank You So much! I am honored by your visit!
it's a really good concepts...
the diary is the inner flow of one's mind and after certain years, one always wonder, laugh, cries at his own writing.

I stuck where it says "Eyesore dwarfs crawls , on its golden pages."
A bit more description would have been great.

It is a very good poem..indeed.


Posted 8 Years Ago


yusuf

8 Years Ago

Thank You! I shall and will keep in mind your review , which i hold close to my brain! I am glad by .. read more
dannnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnng i dont know how to word what i want to say lol so ill just say: "dannnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnng i dont know how to word what i want to say lol so ill just say: good job, keep writting this crazy creepy stuff, its good!"

Posted 8 Years Ago


yusuf

8 Years Ago

Thank You So Much! I am honored by your visit!
A very interesting concept. the concept of the eyesore dwarfs needs to be elaborated just a wee little bit more. Just a little bit more. But great concept to work on! Regards, DN

Posted 8 Years Ago


yusuf

8 Years Ago

Thank You So much! I will keep in mind your luminous review and will redress my work! I am honored!
A well rounded poem sir. It flowed very nicely. I liked how the 'dwarfs' were the ones to read the diary. They could relate to such pain. I felt that this poem was 'pure' as you said the 'diary' was in the poem. I very much enjoyed how this poem told a story. Great peom yusuf! Nailed it! Cheers!

LB

Posted 8 Years Ago


yusuf

8 Years Ago

Thank You so much! it means a lot to me!
yeah.....our own writing do smile backs to us sometime sarcastically.....can relate to that.....

Posted 8 Years Ago


yusuf

8 Years Ago

Thank You So much! I am glad that we strike the same chords!
Sourodip

8 Years Ago

Yeah really i do feel the same way ....like my own writing laughing at me....:D
yusuf

8 Years Ago

:)

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