My First Haiku: Oyster

My First Haiku: Oyster

A Poem by Zainab UF
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The title says it all... well, mostly.

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Grains of sand
Become ethereal pearls
In her magical touch

© 2012 Zainab UF


Author's Note

Zainab UF
Yes, I know haiku follows a 5-7-5 pattern but I find haikus in English don't strictly adhere to it. This one is a tribute to all my teachers, for dedicating their lives to making better people out of us ignorant kids. (It's Teacher's Day here in India!)

So is it utter rubbish? Or "not bad for a novice" level? Do tell me!

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Enjoyed reading this! I like the last sentence. You should write a poem about magic and fairies, I bet it would be pretty amazing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Zainab UF

11 Years Ago

Awww, thank you so much, for reviewing as well as giving me something to work on! :)
Forever Hidden

11 Years Ago

Thank YOU for posting this! :)
Very sacred thought.
Greet you,Zainab.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Zainab UF

11 Years Ago

I'm glad you think so. Thank you! :)
Awwh, such a nice tribute to your teachers! Not a lot of people thank or be grateful for teachers, instead they run over them and give them headaches. Honestly, teachers don't make enough money for how they get treated constantly. That's my opinion of course though! They do give us the best gift yet--turning into brilliant young adults and making us into "something" when we get out into the real world. Some of the students at my school might not realize that now, but they will either sooner or later. You done an excellent job for this being your first haiku!:)) Don't worry about the pattern not matching because a lot of people usually don't follow the poetry rules!.... I might not sometimes ;) Good job, again!!

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Zainab UF

11 Years Ago

Thank you, Ashley! This review means a lot to me. I agree that teacher are not given their due.
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Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect

11 Years Ago

You're welcome, and anything I review is out of my honest perspective of the piece that the author p.. read more
Very nice.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Zainab UF

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Jessa! :)
That1Nerd23

11 Years Ago

You're welcome! (:

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Added on September 5, 2012
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Tags: haiku, oyster, pearls, sand, teachers

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Zainab UF
Zainab UF

Calicut, Kerala, India



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