Haiku: What-Ifs

A haiku on the questions that always seem to plague us...

Ghosts of past

Haunting the present

Clouding future

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The past does block the future. Forgiveness must be found before it is too late. Thank you for the excellent Haiku.
Coyote

[Zainab UF]

Thank you for the heartfelt review :)

[Felecia]

I haven't read many haiku's in my time...although I have a really good friend who I know writes them (never read any of them), but anywho, this is a nice, short and sweet one. I like it very much. It's dark and hauting for such a small thing now isn't it? But small things can pack a punch! Good job

[Zainab UF]

Well, size is no guarantee of power. :) And thanks for the review!

[Felecia]

Agreed!

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

short, sweet, full of darkness, perfect

[Zainab UF]

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.

[David Scott]

Nice timeline and title. I would like to see it less linear and use the 5/7/5 like:
Clouding the future
Haunting spring with winter past
Ghosts ever present
but you got it across for sure, just my take for what it's worth

[Zainab UF]

Oh wow. Thank you so much for that beautiful haiku and the instructive review!

[G!o]

Very small piece yet carries all the words that a heart can speak...this is all true about the chain of tomorrow, today and yesterday affect each other. Nice One.

[Zainab UF]

Thank you for the appreciative words!

[Shay]

i liked it alot, sometimes i can not keep from feeling the way the poem presents...

[Zainab UF]

I'm glad you liked it!

[eglantine]

sometimes we just need to let go

[Zainab UF]

I think so too... thanks for reading and sharing your opinion!

[Mark]

I like the time progression and the metaphor. Haiku is usually a 5 - 7 - 5, and I can see adding to this that would make it more readable in that form, but that's totally up to you.

[Zainab UF]

Thank you for the review!

[Kelsey]

This is a lovely little piece with a very nice question. Definitely makes you think. Nicely done. x

[Zainab UF]

Thanks a lot! This means a lot to me.

[RachelReaper]

"ghost of past" was my favorite line.

[Zainab UF]

I'm happy you liked it! :)

[RachelReaper]

i did :)