The Rose

An angel may be too near of an amorous person. But she may be far away for him to approach her.

A morning bird beckoned me here,
To meet  my angel longing to share.
I felt too shy to gaze at her face,
What charm is there,I can't trace.

I saw the soft lips with very light hue,
What magic is hidden there,nobody knew.
I craved to touch the wonderful lips,
The bird stopped me to offer some tips.

I stared deep into the skies of the eyes,
I saw there rainbows playing with butterflies.
I craved to move my fingers over the gems,
The bird stopped me to offer  other games.

I looked at the thin pink-colored ear.
It was so lovely with the simple gear!
I stooped to see the type of the pierce,
The bird stopped me,it looked fierce!

I switched my vision to the  golden fleece,
That covered the head of my lovely bliss.
I moved to examine the sparkle of the hair,
The bird stopped me saying  it would not be fair.

With broken heart, I looked at her nose,
I saw with pleasure, it bloomed like a rose!
I opted to get closer  and take some smell,
The bird happily sang and wagged its tail.

Reviews

[Saddam]

this is very dearful natural poetry, I like willium Wordsworth poetry of nature, and this was like one of them. Not for comparison it is truly. Very imaginative and we can see your deep eyes on nature.
I stared deep into the skies of the eyes,
I saw there rainbows playing with butterflies.

[zainul]

I feel very honored and inspired by your admiring review.
Thank you dear poet for stopping by to grace this piece.

[Saddam]

absolutely my pleasure dear poet.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

nice flow and structure and the theme conveys beautiful imagery well done

[zainul]

Thanks for the lovely review.

[dreaming dame]

Pretty, and something different. Have never read anything like this. In a good way though:)

[zainul]

Thanks for the lovely review.
Your words are encouraging.

[Skye]

I found it cute, and loved how you kept returning to the bird. Adorable and enjoyable. :)

[zainul]

Thanks for the nice review.
It is inspiring.

[Beck Louise]

This is very beautiful!

[zainul]

I feel happy to read your inspiring review.
Thanks a lot.

[Lena M. P.]

Nicely penned my friend. The play of metaphor was well done. Imagery was excellent.

[zainul]

Thanks for the wonderful review.
I feel honored by your nice words.

[Debbie_Philly]

Very beautiful ... I can feel every line... great flow and rhyme.. I very much enjoyed this :)

[zainul]

Thanks for the nice review.
Thank you for enjoying.

[Debbie_Philly]

Your very welcome !!

[zainul]

Have a nice sleep with the fragrance of rose.

[Annabelle Lee]

very descriptive, though a tad hard to follow, i could hardly make it through the first stanza and halfway through i just had to quit. There is some great potential here yet, and it may just be my style. I found it sleep and a bit droning and as before said, hard to follow, i saw in an earlier review that the critic found there to be loose ends, not quite tied up yet. But hey, that's what.sequels are.for! like i said, DO NOT let this discourage you! I can tell that you are.very passionate... i would consider using that passion to maybe write about something real, something close to your hert.

[Brittany]

This is very beautiful. In fact it was breathtaking :) Good Job

[zainul]

Thank you Brittany for the great review and nice compliments.
Have a good day.

[Brittany]

You too

[Lindsay T]

This is really beautiful! Stunning poetic voice and an amazing flow with your words. What more can a reader ask for? Nice job.

[zainul]

Thank you Lindsay for the great review and compliments.

[zainul]

This is poetry, you listened to your heard.
Beautiful. Within the bird, as she.

Something Asian, is speaking rich in thee. 100!

E.L.

[zainul]

Thanks for the great review.

You're welcome kind sir. Love your work! keep on listening, and I shall feel.

E.L.

[zainul]

I am very very impressed,adorable madam.