The Rose

An angel may be too near of an amorous person. But she may be far away for him to approach her.

A morning bird beckoned me here,
To meet  my angel longing to share.
I felt too shy to gaze at her face,
What charm is there,I can't trace.

I saw the soft lips with very light hue,
What magic is hidden there,nobody knew.
I craved to touch the wonderful lips,
The bird stopped me to offer some tips.

I stared deep into the skies of the eyes,
I saw there rainbows playing with butterflies.
I craved to move my fingers over the gems,
The bird stopped me to offer  other games.

I looked at the thin pink-colored ear.
It was so lovely with the simple gear!
I stooped to see the type of the pierce,
The bird stopped me,it looked fierce!

I switched my vision to the  golden fleece,
That covered the head of my lovely bliss.
I moved to examine the sparkle of the hair,
The bird stopped me saying  it would not be fair.

With broken heart, I looked at her nose,
I saw with pleasure, it bloomed like a rose!
I opted to get closer  and take some smell,
The bird happily sang and wagged its tail.

Reviews

[Saddam]

this is very dearful natural poetry, I like willium Wordsworth poetry of nature, and this was like one of them. Not for comparison it is truly. Very imaginative and we can see your deep eyes on nature.
I stared deep into the skies of the eyes,
I saw there rainbows playing with butterflies.

[zainul]

I feel very honored and inspired by your admiring review.
Thank you dear poet for stopping by to grace this piece.

[Saddam]

absolutely my pleasure dear poet.

[MIB]

Well I enjoyed this immensely, probably because I love watching the birds when I put bread and bits out in the back garden for them... I'm so happy this one ended up happily singing ;) keep up the awesome work :D

[....]

This is so wonderful, beautiful. Love the colorfulness of this write.
Every so lovely and poetic. Love it!

[Gypsy Dreamer]

Love the imagery. I love watching birds wag their tail feathers in my bird bath. It's beautiful and this reminded me of it.

[Alicia Beavis]

"I can't trace" - changing this to "I cannot trace" just flowed a tiny bit better to me.

Lovely use of imagery and lovely sentiments you've expressed in this piece.

[cilla]

What a beautiful poem and what lessons we can learn from the many creatures of our natural world. There is beauty everywhere waiting to be discovered ... and you have captured a very special, dreamlike moment here. Bravo to you!
~Cilla~

[KAREN]

Beauifully done! Well written, with awesome imagery.

[Cherrie Palmer]

this poem is smooth, light and flows so naturally it stirs images that flicker from place to place untill the ending brings it into focus

[zainul]

Dear Sean,
Thanks for the very constructive criticism.I feel very good that you also love butterflies in poetry.
Please have a look at the following link regarding your comment on wagging tail by birds:
http://www.birdchannel.com/bird-behaviors/bird-behavior-tail-wagging.aspx
I feel very happy to be blessed by your nice feed-backs.
Best regards,
Zainul

[Sean Allen]

Now I've read two of your poems and both have butterflies which I like in poetry... hard to picture a bird wagging its tail however, something I expect from a puppy.