Hold Still

Hold Still

A Poem by ZeeArsonist

sheets float down through white sunlight
burying admiration

definitions and ideas of gracefulness
lay still teeth clenched

wear silence like a badge

 

the perpetual mindfuck
insides recoiling memory fetal positions
time passes between forgotten blinks

just lay still teeth clenched

curl up in silence; stolen empty space


failed reflections

distoritons

endless f*****g fun house mirrors
just lay still teeth clenched

holding silence like knife

 

lay still

teeth clenched

swallow your attempts

like a sleeping pill

like a suicide.

 

© 2014 ZeeArsonist


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holding silence like knife to your own throat
That is a brillant line..
A feeling I can totally relate to.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This reads like a nightmare..."time passes between forgotten blinks" really resonates. A soft flowing style that delivers a huge punch. Very well crafted

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The words really just shred into you. Makes you feel every line like a memory being played over in a dream.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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I love the unrestrained phrases that you use which really makes it creative in its passion. My curiosity kept on being peaked and I just loved the little visuals you sent to my mind. Great job..

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This sounds like a personal experience and I perceived that you are describing a state of perplexity or bewilderment, very intensive reading and compelling experience within your lines. Great job! Thanks for your interest for my person but I don't have a friends list. I keep friends in my heart, you are there now, too. regards from germany, l. gandr�

Posted 11 Years Ago


Everything about your style in this poem is sharp -- the imagery, the diction, the allusions, etc. And the ending really cuts deep, "like a sleeping pill / like a suicide", it's bitter and beautiful. I really admire the way the whole thing sounds when read aloud.

Oh, and the first two lines are incredible, it's like something Jeff Mangum would sing.

Have a nice day!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very introspective and deep...I really dug the metaphors. The last stanza was very poignant and made me think of all the things we go through to be something...I liked this a lot :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow! I was glued to this read the whole way through! You have a creative and unique write here sweetie and I can tell that you are one that knows how to truly express herself! Great job if I must say so myself! I loved it! Keep up the good work sweetie! One luv Miss Arsonist! :)


-JC-

Posted 12 Years Ago


This almost seems to be a poem about a surgical procedure unwanted/wanted internal conflict. Powerful Imagery completely removed from the cliche`.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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