Warm Honey

Warm Honey

A Poem by Zugzwang
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The first three lines are pretty accurate. The last line is a massive over exaggeration but I just couldn't resist! I guess that's why they call it poetic license.

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Warm honey, her voice flows into me:
This heartbeat cries it's sweet refrain.
This face her shining eyes don't see
Must mask it's deep abiding pain.

© 2015 Zugzwang


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I love that first line! The rest follows on but the first line is the winner. :-)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

I agree. The first line was good. After that, I was lost....but hey, at least it rhymes right?
Firebird

8 Years Ago

I would read it over and over just for the first line. :-)
Those honeyed tones get you every time. This is really well done. I don't think you could have said more without taking away the essence of it. It fits so well into four lines.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

Thanks, Acoustic. It's a bit over the top but it rang true to me and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks.. read more
This was really short and sweet to read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

Thanks Trish, glad you enjoyed it. Its basically mid life crisis meets teen angst. Excuse me, I need.. read more
The deeper the pain, the sweeter the honey.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

How true! But somehow I dont think I'll be tasting this particular honey. But c'est la vie, as they.. read more
Very emotive, beautifully written. Great for "first experiment" - enjoy rhyming poetry :-)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much. It certainly is emotive! I was surprised at how difdicult rhyming poetry is to .. read more
well i gotta say this one kept me thinking for a while, nice poem by the way

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

Thanks mate, it's my first experiment with rhyming poetry. The subject matter is a bit sad but I thi.. read more

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