A Sonnet for Suicide.

A Sonnet for Suicide.

A Poem by Zugzwang
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Just trying to capture an intense experience in verse.

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My tiny craft had capsized in huge seas,
Was wracked by wind and waves like mountain-sides:
A plaything for vindictive gods, whose tides
Propelled her far, so far away from me.
To tread the water's fine until, you see,
The body's powers bit by bit subside
And then's a battle grim and hard, beside
Extinguished sun, full deaf to any plea.
Oh, I was like those forlorn souls, with guise
Of livid hue, whose limbs upon the waves
Do bob like lifeless things. Electric eyes
Leap from the face, by panic set ablaze.
I heard a voice, from deep below, arise:
'Come deep, find sleep, the sweet surcease you crave'.

© 2015 Zugzwang


Author's Note

Zugzwang
This is my first attempt at a longish rhyming poem. Any suggestions or criticisms are welcome. I hope you enjoy it (!)

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I enjoyed that. Reminiscent of someone like Tennyson.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

Thanks. I've not read him...perhaps I should. This was my first attempt at a sonnet so I'm pretty fo.. read more
I did enjoy it. "Of livid hue, whose limbs upon the waves / Do bob like lifeless things" is one of the best lines I've read on this site. Nice job ☺

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

Thanks Octavia. Well, it's in kind of an archaic style but I found I had to do that to get things to.. read more
NIce piece and I will not try to save you as your notes don't make me feel that murder is your focus at this point in time. I like the flow of this piece and the imagery that you brought to your work. I did enjoy it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

Thanks Willard. You're correct in your assessment. The poem is about an experience that was pretty i.. read more
Its good deep I like it. 😇

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

thanks Annalysiar, I appreciate the review.
annalysiar

8 Years Ago

You're welcome
i think you have good rhythm and wording in this...found this most absorbing...and have often wondered about destiny...reminds me of Clash of the Titans when the gods are playing chess...and are moving the pieces around, the humans....constructing the game...and we are pawns.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

Thanks Jacob. It's based on an actual experience with clinical depression. The experience did i deed.. read more
Fab-U-lous - given your first attempt at short, rhyming poetry was meer days ago this is a huge leap....
I lack sea-legs! So, could really feel the terror/abandonment building as the poem progressed.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

Thanks 'Dragons. I have to say that I'm not particularly pleased with it, as I don't really think it.. read more

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Added on October 8, 2015
Last Updated on November 4, 2015
Tags: sonnet, iambic, pentameter, dark, suicide, depression

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