Denizens

Denizens

A Poem by Zugzwang

Dreams, like days, are

Ghosted by the ravenous:

Deep sea monstrosities

Distend and distort

During long ascents into

The shallow seas.

Still eyes stare roundly,

All flaccid passivity-

But needle-brimming jaws

Snap coldly shut

In reflex, even

After death.

© 2015 Zugzwang


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Wow. This feels eel-y dark. Perhaps speaks to the kind of dreams to which you refer.

Artful use of language to convey this - the contrast of flaccid passivity with the needle-brimming jaws is striking - for me, almost like the sudden shock surprise in certain scary movies, there is a "gotcha" effect at the ending.

Nicely done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

6 Years Ago

Thanks, Tangent. Frankly, I wasn't sure what this one was about while writing it but I think it refe.. read more



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Wow. This feels eel-y dark. Perhaps speaks to the kind of dreams to which you refer.

Artful use of language to convey this - the contrast of flaccid passivity with the needle-brimming jaws is striking - for me, almost like the sudden shock surprise in certain scary movies, there is a "gotcha" effect at the ending.

Nicely done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

6 Years Ago

Thanks, Tangent. Frankly, I wasn't sure what this one was about while writing it but I think it refe.. read more
Haunting and dark. Scary enough to evoke nightmares. I think the imagery is great. Good write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Firebird. Glad you liked it. Dream well.
amazing imagery...those dreams are there till we die...till the jaws snap shut...we reach for them even after we expire...but for the most part, they have become ghosts long before we do.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zugzwang

6 Years Ago

Yes. They are not as real as we are yet have a power over us while we sleep and sometimes during the.. read more
I like the start, dreams like days.... It leaves the reader wondering which is worse, dreams or reality.
Perfectly worded with not a word wasted.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Zugzwang

6 Years Ago

Thank you, sir. You are literally too kind. I love the alliterative line!

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