Silent Witness

Silent Witness

A Poem by Zugzwang
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Based on a dream

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Blithely speeding down a darkened dream highway,

The silent passenger seated mutely at my side

Was witness to the sickening thud and

Shuddering lurch as I hit someone at speed.

The woman was killed instantly,

And as her body sailed

Lazily through the fraught air and over the car,

Her eyes flicked open wide

And locked onto mine:

Piercing with their electric blue

Pure awareness-

I was impaled, as

She saw into me,

Saw all of me,

And knew my fear.

I cannot forget this moment.

I cannot forget this moment.

I cannot forget this moment.

© 2015 Zugzwang


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Maybe the silent passenger was your conscience and the open eyes of the victim were you, looking into yourself and what you have done. Or maybe I should just stop reading dream interperatation books.
I like the intensity of your words in this. Its like we are the passenger and feel the fear you portray.
Superb.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Well intuited. I think I am probably all 3 of the characters here, or that they represent different .. read more
alifeacoustic

3 Years Ago

Oh, theres always some think us crazy, what can we do? :)
Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

True, dat. We all carry our own personal hell around with us. Hang on....thats a poem right there. T.. read more



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The witness was not to the murder I feel. Instead, this silent enigma was the witness of change. The change of who you were into the killer now. A silent judge passing a verdict. Thank you for the writing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Zugzwang

2 Years Ago

Interesing interpretation. The best thing about writing poetry is seeing all the varying ways a poem.. read more
Wow that's a varry powerful piece I must say 😊

Posted 3 Years Ago


Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Pink Elephant. I appreciate the comment.
This is the kind of dream that would wake you up in a cold sweat. I hope the writing of this great poem has helped to exorcise it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

It's getting worse actually!
I am starting to look into the meaning and it's not pretty.
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Firebird

3 Years Ago

Hmm...looking into it can give you nightmares but may be necessary. Your mind sorts itself out while.. read more
Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

It's all good. I have some helpful people around me!
Love love !! I feel the emotion in the repetition

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your review, Trish. It is much appreciated.
wow! deeply effective writing and imagery. your words took me in as though I was watching a most intense movie scene. what a way to wake up...

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Thank you, LaShaye. I'm glad you enjoyed that fragment. Perhaps I'll post some more. Thanks very muc.. read more
Maybe the silent passenger was your conscience and the open eyes of the victim were you, looking into yourself and what you have done. Or maybe I should just stop reading dream interperatation books.
I like the intensity of your words in this. Its like we are the passenger and feel the fear you portray.
Superb.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Well intuited. I think I am probably all 3 of the characters here, or that they represent different .. read more
alifeacoustic

3 Years Ago

Oh, theres always some think us crazy, what can we do? :)
Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

True, dat. We all carry our own personal hell around with us. Hang on....thats a poem right there. T.. read more
Whoa.
There seems to be a lot going on here - stuff of significance.

The silent passenger, sitting mutely in the second line, is not referred to after that. Were I that passenger, I think the driver would be at risk of howling deafness at the moment of striking the woman. Interesting...

And the woman was killed upon impact but, tumbling in the air, her eyes flick open and impale you (dang!) - as if she were no longer the casualty but now you were the fatality - all pretense and facade shredded. Full discovery, full exposure, complete vulnerability - pure awareness. I think I could see how that might get the anxiety percolating a bit.

How would a moment like that ever be forgotten?

Interesting use of language. Blithely and lazily felt to me to be set against sickening and shuddering, but not in a yin/yang way. There’s friction in between.

I cannot know what the initial intent in composing this might have been This is just how it’s striking me at this moment. A haunting piece. There feels to me to be an almost primitive emotional tone to it. You carried it well.


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Yar, it's pretty heavy. It is based on a dream I had that has been haunting me. Don't ask me what it.. read more
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