Dream Girl

She has made the long journey

From nightmare

To the waking world.

Her piercing blue

Dead eyes

Bore further into me

With each footfall.

Her voice blurbles gently

In the language of the dead:

We can not understand it-

But she will open my chest

In a heartbeat,

Babbling soft nonsense

While her bloodied hands

Remove my organs

One by one.

 

31 March, 2016

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

Very eerie and haunting. This could evolve into a brilliant bed time story for grown ups.

[Zugzwang]

Hi Ana,
Thanks for the review and for droppi g on by. I think you're right. This would make a great short story...it might find its way into my next narrative piece.
Z.

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome Z. :)

[Lori Brown Boniciolli]

Haunting; Is she death? Love the last 3 lines...

Sincerely

Lori Brown Boniciolli

[Zugzwang]

Hi Lori,
She is a girl from a dream who is now part of my waking thoughts. I honestly can't tell you who she is. She is magical, entrancing, monstrous and murderous, but not out of spite, it's in her nature to kill.
Z.

[Riley]

i cannot tell, is she hurting you or are you enjoying this, either way I love this, good read!

[Zugzwang]

It's weird and ambiguous, I know. The idea came from a dream I had so the meaning is unclear at best.

[Gaia Octavia]

She sounds like a gas! I'd hang out with this badass chick and tell everyone to eat their heart out. It takes a special kind of monster to be able to calmly interact with their prey as they dismantle it. What a terrific nightmare.

[Zugzwang]

Yes, it was a wonderful experience...I highly recommend it. :)

[LostBoy]

Interesting. Kinda weird but it's got something. You've made it above average too. Congrats

[Zugzwang]

Thanks for the review and for dropping by.

[LostBoy]

No prob your stuff seems readable

[Zugzwang]

Thank you...I think.

[Gaia Octavia]

Ha! Love this.

[V]

I like the combination of tenderness in your words, such as "babbling softly" with cruelty, directness, particularly shown in the last two lines. An interesting and thought provoking read.

[Zugzwang]

Yep, it's a bit of a weird one. It's based on a nightmare I had and can't seem to forget.
Thanks for dropping by.
z.

[V]

It's an interesting depiction. You're welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the sardonic title...and the irony of this...in a figurative sense, she is dead to me now...and she is removing my organs, first of all my heart...then hopefully, my memory.

dark in such a good way...love "Blurbling soft nonsense"---

[Zugzwang]

Thanks, J. I love your take on this one. As always, appreciate the review.
z.

[Johnspoetry]

Very dark but strangely inviting .

[Zugzwang]

If you figure out what it means, let me know!
Thanks for the review,
z.