Dream Girl

Dream Girl

A Poem by Zugzwang

She has made the long journey

From nightmare

To the waking world.

Her piercing blue

Dead eyes

Bore further into me

With each footfall.

Her voice blurbles gently

In the language of the dead:

We can not understand it-

But she will open my chest

In a heartbeat,

Babbling soft nonsense

While her bloodied hands

Remove my organs

One by one.

 

31 March, 2016

© 2017 Zugzwang


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Very eerie and haunting. This could evolve into a brilliant bed time story for grown ups.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Hi Ana,
Thanks for the review and for droppi g on by. I think you're right. This would make a.. read more
Matching Socks

3 Years Ago

You're welcome Z. :)
Haunting; Is she death? Love the last 3 lines...

Sincerely

Lori Brown Boniciolli

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Hi Lori,
She is a girl from a dream who is now part of my waking thoughts. I honestly can't t.. read more
i cannot tell, is she hurting you or are you enjoying this, either way I love this, good read!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

It's weird and ambiguous, I know. The idea came from a dream I had so the meaning is unclear at best.. read more
She sounds like a gas! I'd hang out with this badass chick and tell everyone to eat their heart out. It takes a special kind of monster to be able to calmly interact with their prey as they dismantle it. What a terrific nightmare.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Yes, it was a wonderful experience...I highly recommend it. :)
Interesting. Kinda weird but it's got something. You've made it above average too. Congrats

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LostBoy

3 Years Ago

No prob your stuff seems readable
Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Thank you...I think.
Gaia Octavia

3 Years Ago

Ha! Love this.
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I like the combination of tenderness in your words, such as "babbling softly" with cruelty, directness, particularly shown in the last two lines. An interesting and thought provoking read.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Yep, it's a bit of a weird one. It's based on a nightmare I had and can't seem to forget.
Tha.. read more
V

3 Years Ago

It's an interesting depiction. You're welcome.
love the sardonic title...and the irony of this...in a figurative sense, she is dead to me now...and she is removing my organs, first of all my heart...then hopefully, my memory.

dark in such a good way...love "Blurbling soft nonsense"---

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

Thanks, J. I love your take on this one. As always, appreciate the review.
z.
Very dark but strangely inviting .

Posted 3 Years Ago


Zugzwang

3 Years Ago

If you figure out what it means, let me know!
Thanks for the review,
z.

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