‘The Eternal Echo of a Screaming Soul’

‘The Eternal Echo of a Screaming Soul’

A Poem by Hello, Goodbye
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..residual aches of an emotional break..

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Look through my eyes so you can see, 
The pain that dwells inside of me. 
The pain that shreds and rips apart, 
The fabrics of joy within my heart. 

Look through my eyes so you can see, 
The open wounds inside of me. 
A soul that echoes, recollections of pain, 
Vibrations of anguish that enduringly drain. 

Look through my eyes so you can feel, 
The residual ache that is much too real. 
The progressive sorrow that haunts my heart. 
A hurting that has extinguished a once luminous spark


- DespondentDreamer

© 2010 Hello, Goodbye


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First off, I love the rhyming scheme. I know exactly how you feel which I believe is the purpose of poems like these, so that people can understand you when it seems like no one does. If that's an incorrect interpretation then I apologize, but that's the way I see it. I really liked it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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My suggestion...add one or two more stanzas, and then a chorus. You could have a serious song with this one.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Another sublime poem strong emotionally and very descriptive you never cease to amaze me very well done with this piece keep them coming

100/100

Posted 13 Years Ago


Full of honesty and.... well reality. Talking about looking inside a person, to see their true selves. To look beyond the exterior and really get to know a heart, and see there ugly side, as well as beautiful.... Perfectly written.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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First off, I love the rhyming scheme. I know exactly how you feel which I believe is the purpose of poems like these, so that people can understand you when it seems like no one does. If that's an incorrect interpretation then I apologize, but that's the way I see it. I really liked it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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A very nice poem , I liked the pain the feeling n how you written it. its gratifying ..


Posted 13 Years Ago


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I like it a lot, it's very real, I can actually relate to it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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A great title...truly...A powerful and deep piece...a soft melancholy flow carries the words of this piece..A beautifully sad and heartfelt piece...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love and abandonment plays hard on emotions!
Heartache will always ensue…


Posted 13 Years Ago


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the eyes are the windows to the soul..if we can see through each other eyes..think of what we could solve...

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Spectacular poem, loved the rhyme... Wonderful, heart-felt description, " look into my eyes " is very nice since eyes are the mirror the reflects what's going inside your heart... Great job, a big 100 for this.

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Added on September 7, 2010
Last Updated on September 7, 2010
Tags: Despondency, Eternity, Emotions, Gloom, Fear

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Hello, Goodbye
Hello, Goodbye

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