Clouds Rising; Love Sightings

Clouds Rising; Love Sightings

A Poem by Yann Bellemare
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inspired by Cloud Gazing, Love's Phasing

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We lay here together

Moments with you won't last forever

While your head gently nests

Between my waist and my chest

I've never before enjoyed like this, looking at the sky

From the corner of my eye

I catch a glimpse of your smile never gone to waste, and your pretty face, with a background of rye

 

You keep a hand, stopping me from looking at my watch

I can't help but to think, you're everything I thought

It makes me feel as though my heart's been tossed

My heartbeat stops

I think about my soon to be loss

Who's apparently

Wearing gloss

 

A soft breeze passes us by

I'm engulfed by your enthusiastic scent

As it takes me over

Step by step

We both have no idea

Where time went

The sun is setting and molding

With the up and coming crescent

Night has crept

 

Our mutual importance is prime

Our hearts

Beat at the same time

We simultaneously look at ourselves

Like a rhyme

We know its time

Its almost like we hear the chime

After getting in that car, there's no physical rewind

 

As we walk away, my left hand on your hip

I have a hard time losing grip

I feel our interior grit

I feel our similiar wit

I feel our similiar desire to just sit

Possibly lose it

Lust fits

And talk

Or walk

Publish our remarks

To each other, guaranteed sparks

 

But in the end, I can be content

Because our time, well spent

Was nothing less than exquisite

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2014 Yann Bellemare


Author's Note

Yann Bellemare
this one felt extremely good

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An interesting rhyme scheme, well-executed to convey a great message. It had a bit of a "message in a bottle to my love" feel to it, but maybe that's just me. The sensation is mostly due to the rhyme scheme and the tone of how i read it, as opposed to the words themselves which showed an intimate moment spent with a loved one. Well written, indeed!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Ahh, i love the tone of this one and it flows very well. Great piece!

Posted 6 Years Ago


"Our mutual importance is prime

Our heart, beats at the same time

We simultaneously look at ourselves, like a rhyme"

A splendid read and write...:)......................


Posted 6 Years Ago


An interesting rhyme scheme, well-executed to convey a great message. It had a bit of a "message in a bottle to my love" feel to it, but maybe that's just me. The sensation is mostly due to the rhyme scheme and the tone of how i read it, as opposed to the words themselves which showed an intimate moment spent with a loved one. Well written, indeed!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I quite enjoyed this write. You have a very moody and sublime poetic voice, which I can appreciate. This sounds a lot like music to me as I read. I can relate to the elegance of an encounter such as this and the not wanting for that moment to end. I wouldn't suggest any changes, this one stands tall and proud on its own.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is extremely good, and well written... I really enjoyed it... I just love your writing style..

An amazing poem, well done...:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Oh my goodness, you are brilliant! Just saying, lol. This was beautiful and expressed a poignant sentiment: Enjoy the time you have, no matter how limited, because it was worth every single second. I know the feeling all too well and the motto is something I try to live by. I love the way this flowed, loved the imagery and the memories it conjured for me.

"Our mutual importance is prime
Our heart, beats at the same time
We simultaneously look at ourselves, like a rhyme
We know its time
Its almost like we hear the chime
After getting in that car, there's no physical rewind"

Know that feeling too! So, this was pretty amazing and I'm putting it in my favorites. Bravo :]

Posted 11 Years Ago


this is a well written poem.. but i just didn't like it that much

not my style

dont get me wrong, its a good poem, its well-done and ur a great writer
just not my style

Posted 11 Years Ago


A romantic look into a situation veiled in want and warmth.

'We both have no idea where the time went / The sun is setting and is molding with the up and coming crescent / Night has crept' .. those three lines conjur a most beautiful picture.

There's something very special when two people feel they're two parts of a whole, and, even if they separate, they've made a memory that does remain 'exquisite'

Great write, fine words. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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