A Poem by Raspberry Rebel

Feathery strokes caress downy
Ivory blush cheek of
Newborn, as sleepy smiles
Greet outstretched loving arms.
Eager lips searches busoms
Rosy bud, suckling...A lonely
Intensely overwhelmed by
Sobs silently...

© 2011 Raspberry Rebel

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Thought provoking

Posted 12 Years Ago



A sweet poetic form of trajedy... again, trajedy of a young adult, never ready -

Are we ever ready?

The babe you speak was innocently played into the arms of a teen mom. It amazes me how short, simple words transform much complexity (by placement) WITH VERY FEW CONJUNCTIONS.

Beautiful, Enlightening and Sad.

Consideration? Placing this one in the Enlightenment contest for Poetic Infusion Society...

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful, powerfully emotive in such few words, movement of time reflected in a fluid movement within the writing, creates a great impact without over complicating, reading between the lines shows the emotions as they transform. Really like it

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How sweet is this...


Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful acrostic poem, such gentleness and loving emotions, you end this so perfectly with the overwhelming element. Keep em' coming.

Have you found him yet.
New message ~ Jacob says hello and is here. Find him Find me ~

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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6 Reviews
Added on June 16, 2011
Last Updated on June 16, 2011


Raspberry Rebel
Raspberry Rebel

Liverpool, Netherley, United Kingdom


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