A Story by Amanda Patschke

Trapped, losing sight of freedom, lost in pain, and scarred by an endless nightmare.

There was a fire... It was an uncontrollable blaze of heat, spreading from rafter and curtain to rug, wood and straw. Women and children screamed, trapped inside the building. Black smoke stung their eyes and intense heat seared their skin, as they quickly suffocated to death.
Azali's eyes shot open. She was breathing fast and unearthly cries echoed in her mind. It was just a dream, she realized, slowly adjusting to her current state of being. There was no fire, only total darkness. That was normal, except she couldn't hear the wind blowing against her tent.
She moved but solid chains were locked around her wrist and ankles.
Something terrible happened to me while I was asleep.
The lock pick in her back pocket for emergencies was far out of reach. No sounds could be heard. The air was cold and thin; it was difficult to breathe.
Where am I? Have I been left to die?
"Hello!" she cried out as loud as possible.
There was no answer.
"Is anybody out there!"
After waiting a minute the silence prevailed.
I might as well keep screaming. There's no other way.
"Can you hear me! I'm trapped! I need help! Come get me out of these chains!"
Time passed and her throat became tight, sore and dry. It refused to project any more words.

© 2016 Amanda Patschke

Author's Note

Amanda Patschke
This is unfinished, so wait for more. The beginning will be mega dark, so think happy thoughts and you'll make it through with only a few nightmares.

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This is a really good start to the story. It makes your reading wonder what's going on and what is going to happen next. Can't wait to read some more.

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A good dramatic start that lends itself to more

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Added on June 8, 2016
Last Updated on June 27, 2016
Tags: horror, torture, dark, fiction, magic, action, fight, romance, adventure, war, fantasy, violence, mystery, suspense, angst


Amanda Patschke
Amanda Patschke

Pearland, TX

School: Pearland High School '11 San Jacinto South College University of Houston Central Sex: Female Birthday: February 23, 1993 Siblings: one older sister Political Views: Republican Rel.. more..