Internal War

Internal War

A Poem by Doodley
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And soon the darkness.

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What dark, deep thoughts come in the midnight hour,
To seize my mind with a maddening power;
To crush all the purpose i gather each day,
To haunt all my dreams in my sleep where i lay;


Thee foul beast of madness! What do you want of me?
Release me from your clutches! Just let me be free!
Be off with you, demons! And soar far away,
Else I'll come with my Reason, and you will i slay.

© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Just a short poem. Darker than usual.

Any comments are appreciated.

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Great use of dialogue, the sheer fact that the narrator-self is not entirely ridden of his extremes of his own passions makes this a compelling, a powerful read. I admire the fact that you bring variety with your plethora of poems, there is a certain madness, a delectable dedication in the way you celebrate writing and are enraptured with the play of words. While the first stanza pitches the mood for what plagues the poet, the determination of the poet in the second is uplifting and sharp, which contrasts and complements the first stanza emphatically.

Keep writing Doodley. If someone can celebrate writer's block the way you have, then blessed be he.

Best,
M.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Mallika Relives

2 Years Ago

I hope it is on a certain captain and his lighthouse! So Hemmingway!
Doodley

2 Years Ago

It will be, i think. And by the way.....*Hemingway*.......:p
Mallika Relives

2 Years Ago

Errrr.......



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Shorter poems can be more difficult to write then longs ones. There is just few poets who can manage this. I really like it. Cause myself I have some kind of dark season at my writing. Yes our demons are stronger and sometimes they are not always bad. You great powerful hellish imaginary quiet rare on this site.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Une Saison. Yes, shorter poems are much harder to write than th.. read more
BANISHED

6 Months Ago

Yes this completely truth at my opinion Rilke was master of this type of poem. I like it cause there.. read more
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Zoe
Power-packed! The second stanza especially. Very relatable. The idle mind wanders off to places where we don't even dare enter.
A question...why did you capitalise the 'r' in reason..The very last line.
Other than that, a great poem, as always!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Zoe. I capitalised the 'R' to help the reader differentiate bet.. read more
Zoe

6 Months Ago

All right there. A great read. You're always welcome!
Else I'll come with my Reason, and you will i slay.
Yes our mind, our thoughts are our domain and we simply can slay something that bothers.
Is there a thing you can't do with words Doodley? Simple, but very impressive with Doodley Style Perfection. I loved the write.
Thanks for sharing. keep writing.:-)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing once again, Bala. I appreciate your kind words and support of my.. read more

Simple but powerful.
I really like reading your work. It is flawless.
Every line is amazing.
I wonder how life would be without those deep and dark thoughts.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gorthi. I appreciate your kind words about this simple piece. L.. read more
Gorthi Manasvini

1 Year Ago

I agree with your point of view.
This is a very nice way of celebrating your writings.
Real or not....I am impressed.
Every one has his own inspiration for writing stories.
With me, I try my best to stay away from writing as much as possible but after 2-3 weeks I can't control myself and those ideas leave me to get absorbed in the paper.
Well written...
Just one more thing...Maybe I am wrong, but I think there should be capital 'I' instead of 'i'.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Usman. I was just getting started on one of your requests earli.. read more
I loved it! Nice clean flow of words. It pulled me in and reminded me of
my demons that do lurke in my head...

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, That Guy. I appreciate your kind review of this poem. Welcome t.. read more
nice poem! short, to the point. I have some weird dreams to. 8/10 :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Noob. Kind words. Welcome to my poetic domain.
Great use of dialogue, the sheer fact that the narrator-self is not entirely ridden of his extremes of his own passions makes this a compelling, a powerful read. I admire the fact that you bring variety with your plethora of poems, there is a certain madness, a delectable dedication in the way you celebrate writing and are enraptured with the play of words. While the first stanza pitches the mood for what plagues the poet, the determination of the poet in the second is uplifting and sharp, which contrasts and complements the first stanza emphatically.

Keep writing Doodley. If someone can celebrate writer's block the way you have, then blessed be he.

Best,
M.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Mallika Relives

2 Years Ago

I hope it is on a certain captain and his lighthouse! So Hemmingway!
Doodley

2 Years Ago

It will be, i think. And by the way.....*Hemingway*.......:p
Mallika Relives

2 Years Ago

Errrr.......
Very dark but there's strength in it.
I understand this one, I never sleep well.
Just one of those things...
I like the defiant voice speaking against the demons.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Ana Sophia, for reading and reviewing. I am quite the sleeper, however, like almost every.. read more
That's a good strong lament and a bulwark to stay off from those dark thoughts.
But often striking the dark thoughts with force only makes it more stronger and ferocious. I often feel, it's better to embrace them than rather confront them :D

Nice piece of write, Doodley!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Abhilash. I appreciate your thoughts on this piece. We all have.. read more

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