Away

Away

A Poem by Doodley
"

Given up.

"
What to do? What to say?
When she turns her heels and walks away;
Leaves me alone and standing there,
With a wedding Garland for her hair.

© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
Words.

Any comments appreciated.

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Sometimes, few words describe a big story. This is one such emotional piece.
Very nicely written. :-) :-)
Doodley, You are a King of rhyming.
Your writing is always flawless.( even moon has a scar but your poetry doesn't have it )
Keep writing !!

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gorthi. I appreciate your kind words.



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This poem is short but still hits so hard. Loved it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Short indeed! Thank you for reading and reviewing, Najam. Much appreciation for all these reviews.
Najam Us Saher

1 Year Ago

You're welcome.
A lot said in just a few words. Meaning is very clear. Nice write. Valentine

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Valentine. I appreciate your kind words.
Short but very well written piece. I totally connected to it. Thanks for sharing

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lucky. Welcome to my poetic domain.
Two short questions at that juncture when the pain was pouring without a thunder from the silent stab when one was unarmed !
Kudos your skills! To make one feel the awful agony and yet not letting anything out of order, I mean the rhyming and punctuation.
You stamped a picture there. The imagery of a picture card with two bold questions?
I salute. Keep writing.:-)


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Bala. Very generous appraisal for this very simple poem. I appr.. read more
Sometimes, few words describe a big story. This is one such emotional piece.
Very nicely written. :-) :-)
Doodley, You are a King of rhyming.
Your writing is always flawless.( even moon has a scar but your poetry doesn't have it )
Keep writing !!

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gorthi. I appreciate your kind words.
Just a few words describing the complete feeling... just some lines describing the complete emotion.. just a few thoughts leading to much appreciation....
It's like The Dear Departed....
sad..and sadder... but within that , one may be deserving better....along the way, someone must be waiting...none goes bare hand......... much relatable..... of distance which is something unexpected...
Good piece : )

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you once again, Anindita, for reading and reviewing. Lovely words thoughts you have presented .. read more
Anindita Janhabee

1 Year Ago

thank you and also you're welcome... : )
Amazing how much emotion and meaning this has in such a short poem.
Kind of heart breaking little piece.
Great write again great rhyming.
I really enjoy your poetry

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for another read/review, Cimmy wuv. I appreciate your support of my writing. Sometimes the.. read more
cimmy wuv xxxooo

1 Year Ago

Yes that is true sometimes short poems cn have a larger impact, and just as much meaning to them if .. read more
It is a charming quartet however dismal the tenor and tone of the theme. You indeed are a very precious writer. Keep it up and want to read more of your works.

Best,
M.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Mallika, for reading and reviewing this poem in a most favourable light for such a simple.. read more
Short poems always catch my eye.
This one, didn't disappoint and indeed very neatly done.
The choice of words, the lines and the little dose of humor.
Well written, Doodley!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Abhilash. Short poems are never easy to write. They are far mor.. read more

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