Of Hubris and Debris

Of Hubris and Debris

A Poem by Doodley
"

Arise and be reborn all ye forsaken.

"
In the beauty of darkness with the pregnant moon a-high,
With the songs from the meadow of the Cicadas in full cry;
In the kisses of the night breeze and the chills from her caress,
With the starry sentinels shining in all their eternal bless;
Do I sit under the blanket of the mist in its flow,
And converse with myself, just me and my shadow.


To discuss on our lonesome, the lives floating by,
Of the fools in their bubbles with their heads in the sky;
Standing aloft on their pedestals of vanity and stone,
With nary a realisation that they are simply alone;
And how in the midst of life's vision in this symphonic song,
Could those fools in their bubbles be so tragically wrong.


What beholds such a fool to hang his head high,
And be indifferent to the words and pleas of our cry?
Who professes to know all the wisdom of Man,
Yet in a position of power does naught that he can?
I know not the reasons for the actions they show,
I conversed to myself, just me and my shadow.


For I am not the debris that lies beneath their feet,
But a Phoenix arising from my hibernate sleep;
And I know on the morrow with the dawning of the sun,
I'll rise from my slumber, the sole and only one;
And the words and the whispers that flow from vain tongues,
Will disappear and vanish like the breath from my lungs.

© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A moralistic poem. My first in three months. I am a little rusty. Please forgive me that.

Any comments are greatly appreciated.

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I take it this is a political statement of sorts. Men in power often have a vain side to them. Whether they admit it or not. I'm sure more could be said, but I'll leave it at that.

Despite your being rusty from 3 months off, you still possess the skill to write some great poetry that's enjoyable to read no matter what the true interpretation is.

Posted 1 Year Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Relic. This poem was not directed primarily at politicians but .. read more
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I like this it's descriptive and beautiful
L. 😌

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

7 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Farmgirl. I appreciate your kind words. Welcome to my poetic do.. read more
Farmgirl

7 Months Ago

You are very welcome .
I enjoyed my visit here If love to have some read requests when you fi.. read more
You air, in this clipping, brittle poem, sentiments many share about people in power. Be they sports stars, actors, industrialists or politicians. I particularly enjoyed the first four lines of stanza 2.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, John. I appreciate the kind words.
Rusty? Hmm...if you say so. Anyway, this is quite a powerful piece. You've sculpted it beautifully with vivid imagery (the first four lines really did an amazing job at drawing me in, and the rest easily kept me reading) and compelling words. I've been in a situation similar to this before, where I was just being sort of condescending towards a group of people I thought were rather immature instead of just rising above such judgmental perspectives. That...doesn't quite sound like the meaning I actually got from this (unless I'm just overthinking), but I just woke up, so I'm still a bit groggy. You've really got poetry writing down, don't you? :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Doorman Dan for another review. I will repay them shortly. Your story is similar to what .. read more
DoormanDan

9 Months Ago

True, true.
You have some very nice lines in this write, Not so much rust as you think. Keep writing. Valentine

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

9 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Valentine. Rusty writing is in the quill of the beholder. And t.. read more
lovely piece from a great poet, but I love following lines..

What beholds such a fool to hang his head high,
And be indifferent to the words and pleas of our cry?
Who professes to know all the wisdom of Man,
Yet in a position of power does naught that he can?
I know not the reasons for the actions they show,
I conversed to myself, just me and my shadow

great work! keep writing
Sun

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sun. I appreciate your kind words and continual support of my w.. read more
Sunrising

1 Year Ago

you are welcome, Doodley and all is well.

Take care
God, this is intensely beautiful. You write as if you have been writing for a millennium or more. So eloquent and visual, you kept me captivated through every line. For I am not the

This is a master piece…..

debris that lies beneath their feet,
But a Phoenix arising from my hibernate sleep;
And I know on the morrow with the dawning of the sun,
I'll rise from my slumber, the sole and only one;
And the words and the whispers that flow from vain tongues,
Will disappear and vanish like the breath from my lungs.

These lines are so strong and brave, love it


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lola_Bee. I appreciate your very encouraging opinion of my writ.. read more
Again, another master piece ! I like the tone of your poem. Third stanza is my favorite one.
But these two lines had a great impact on me:
For I am not the debris that lies beneath their feet,
But a Phoenix arising from my hibernate sleep.

You are truly a poet on paper as well as on words.
Keep writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Gorthi. I am humbled by your words and thoughts about this poem.. read more
Mallika Relives

1 Year Ago

I agree with Gorthi on this. It leaves one inspired!
Doodleyyyyyy!! *grabs my head and shakes it in disbelief* How did you write such an incredible poem!?
You say this is rusty? For serious? It sounded like pure inspiration. I loved the rich language and the flawless metre. I love the the descriptions, the cicadas, the night breezes, the fools in their bubbles. I loved the repetition of "I conversed to myself, just me and my shadow." I thought this poem was perfect from Title to finish. Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant. :) Whew, rant is over now. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Calm down! Deep breaths........haha. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Andronicus. Extremely flat.. read more
Andronicus

1 Year Ago

*takes ten deep breaths and calms down* =]
First & foremost, I've missed you while you were gone & am happy to see you here again. Secondly, I usually don't enjoy moralizing, but yours here is very gentle & contemplative, rather than being fire & brimstone. The first stanza did not prepare me for what was to come & I'm still pondering the purpose of starting out in this incongruous way. This is one of those rare times when I can understand & follow a message that's stated in a more elevated & nuanced style, since I usually prefer straightforward, but your message IS straightforward, despite the Shakespearean language & tone. All in all, effective writing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading and reviewing.
A very rich write for both its content, allusions and metaphor. Not so rusty, says I:)):)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Pryde. I certainly felt rusty writing this one. In the meantime.. read more

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