Metanoia

Metanoia

A Poem by Doodley
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Reborn.

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I caught a lonely, falling tear as it escaped my weeping eye,

And placed it on the fiery tail of a comet passing by;

To be borne aloft the velvet nights of endless galaxies,

A tiny particle of my own traversing cosmic seas;

And when that tear on journey's end returned in fortuitous style,

It watered the grooves of my grieving face and upon there bloomed a smile.

© 2016 Doodley



Author's Note

Doodley
A very simple sextet. Just maintaining the writing rage.

Any comments greatly appreciated.

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I had to look up the title word, which is an intriguing word & perfectly chosen. For such a short poem, I felt like I was taken on a long journey of wisdom & clarification. Your rhymes & rhythm work well. I'm very impressed by the overall meaning here, which shows immense imagination blended with a focused purpose of conveying something thought-provoking. This might be one of the best I've read of yours.

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading.



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I think this is a wonderful poem in the way that you have gone from tears to a smile at the end. again, you do that wonderful rhyme and keeping in a form. I appreciate such things, because I have no talent for it.

I shoe this poem because of the title. I know of a band with a similar title

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

2 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Alteng. I appreciate the time. And yes, the title is an unusual.. read more
Beautiful in melody and flow all the through to the ending.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Josie. A writer's block drought breaker this was. I appreciate .. read more
Josie E. Cook M. A.

3 Months Ago

Always a pleasure!
A great concept here written boldly and with a ethereal theme. We often look elsewhere for the answer to our own happiness. For some it is enlightenment through a belief such as religion, however any 'oia' ended word to me signals some form of mental distortion rather than reality and 'groundedness'.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

10 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, John. An interesting interpretation. No mental distortions with.. read more
Made me smile, not only watered your smile but perhaps many gardens. Valentine

Posted 11 Months Ago


Doodley

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Valentine.
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mou
Love this line specially
"And when that tear on journey's end returned in fortuitous style,

It watered the grooves of my grieving face and upon there bloomed a smile. "
very thought provoking one..love it

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

12 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mou. I appreciate your time and kind words.
Oh what a beautiful inter-cosmic tale this has been! You must be one of the scribes of God to write in such delicious fashion about the soul, the metaphysical and the intergalactic wonders. I enjoyed the denouement and the redemption of sorrow into bliss in its conclusion. Certainly one of my favourites on this cafe,.
Keep up the good work. You indeed are super amazing.
Best,
M

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Mallika. A very, very generous response to a very simple piece!.. read more
Does it for me. Tells us all we need to know. Like it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Paul. You already reviewed this one previously.
Paul Bell

1 Year Ago

Gives me a second look.
The title of this piece certainly matches the way it makes me feel . . . I thought the descriptions were ethereal . . . it's like they danced across the screen. I like how you've given an inspirational message in a poignant way -- it doesn't sound cliche like a lot of inspirational poems I read on here. The contrast between the first and last lines was nice too; it uniquely illustrated how sorrow can turn into happiness. Also, the descriptions in the last line were very nice . . . I like how you used the word "bloom" as opposed to a neutral word like "came" or "formed" . . . the word "bloomed" has a beauty and radiance about it, just like the poem as a whole.

Thanks for sharing this.

- William Liston

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, William. I appreciate the kind review. Welcome to my poetic dom.. read more
Ahh, to wish on a shooting star and have that wish come true, written in a sugary and honey comb way lol that's what I think this poem is talking about. Really well written.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Jerry. I like your interpretation of this poem. Its meaning can.. read more
Knocked the ball out of the park again, Doodley.. This one is metered nicely and has a mythical air to it. It feels like a slow, transformimg journey that happened somehow in the blink of six lines. What a deep place you went with this tiny little tear! Keep it up!

.. Misty

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Doodley

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Misty. I wasn't sure if i had knocked this one out of the park!.. read more
M. L. F.

1 Year Ago

Lol! Yes, yes, when Misty calls it out of the park, you can rest assured... IT IS!! ;).
M. L. F.

1 Year Ago

I have excellent taste... In everything BUT men. haha!

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